honestly read this story 2 times and it's always amazing to reread it's probably my favorite pokemon story so thank you for making this

When did he name lucario again as I can’t seem to to see when he is named?

You should include kalos regoin to

You're weiting is cringe

I want to read this story so bad and i keep comming back to it but foe fucks sake it so cringe! Its like, the only pokemon fic series that is still going but i just cant get into it!

Seem like i am not the only one eho get annoyed with team rockets somg

For corns sake! are ALL the gyms gonna be this complicated?, I don't care if he IS the chosen one, that's a lot for one gym!

Ah man.. I was hoping he would actually be an antagonist for once. still a fun chapter regardless.

Wait, if arceus had a hand in creating mew-two, than why let team rocket do it in the first place? aren't they your enemy? why not make him yourself?

That way he is less likely to be a potential threat.

Gotta say, I like arceus acting kinda smart for once, most authors tend to depict him as ether kinda useless, or have him come up with convoluted, albeit effective plans, most interesting, keep up the good work.

it could be a bit better.
like Starmie jumping on Onix before lifting it up, that way, both are in air.

are the lemons/limes just mentions

One of best stories out there

I had such high hopes when I found this story. The description seemed really interesting, and I was super excited to see 2 sequels. And I know you wrote this years ago. Based on your user name, I'm guessing you were in your early 20's. So some expects of your writing can be attributed to youth, but my guy, this dialog. Your dialog is on a level of cringe that is painful, I half expect Ashe to throw out a "M'lady" and tip his hat. Adults don't talk like this, let alone older teenagers, let alone 13 year olds. He sounds like a caricature of The Galant Neckbeard, you know the type. The guy that un-ironically runs around in a fadora and trench coat, with some kind of sword in his hand, talking about how much of a "nice guy" he is.
I'm going to keep reading bc I think the story has potential, just please tell me the dialog gets better?

Your moving way to fast bro your gonna get bored and stop writing if all the team is caught in 5 chapters. You’ve already got 4 and it’s only chapter 3 none of ashes Pokémon has had enough time to train properly and now ash has to split his attention to relatively low Pokémon which will just slow them down.