Hello

this is great please right more! xx

I love this story, love to have a lover him.

Ew bitch u suk

love this story, wish it was real... lou isnt into me tho

Oh my god! Loooooved it! The ending was so cute! And Louis and his girlish troubles were just... alshakalvsan *Leroy voice* PER-FECT.

Wooow, this was just soooo ! I'm at a loss of words right now, sorry if I'm not too coherent, besides I'm still nose bleeding xD This is great, marvelous, so sweet, and soft, and gentle and innocent and yet so deep, so profound and intense, it's a merely magnificent story, the way you write drives me crazy, it's just insane, I can't believe the effect this had on me. Brilliant work, I really wish you would write some more similar stories XD ... *laughs insanely due to an overwhelming perversion attack*

3 I love this/

Girl I love it! As weird as I sound haha. It was really good!

That is really good...it would be weird if it really happened though... Lol

Hahaahahhahaha awesome! I loved it bunches! It was amazing, and I hope you make more stories like this!

You should do Ziall one shot.

It's a little bit pervert but I like it :D

One critique of you fanfic: subject-verb agreement. Learn it bitch.

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