|Reviews for Spiral|
| nattylovesjordy chapter 4 . 12/13/2011
You also had to know that I'd like the parallels between the whole "breathing" thing. Because, I mean, come on. I did. A lot. Especially since, well... it's totally a Booth thing? Like, I'm not surprised by that in the least, but for Bones to do it... yeah. That's what I really like about it. :)
And then there's the whole idea of the beginning being an ending, which you threw in here.
Lovely story! Great story! One of my favorite stories? Probably, yeah!
-sigh- Sad it's over, to see it go, but it was fantastic and worth it! Thank you!
| nattylovesjordy chapter 3 . 12/13/2011
In honor of my return to reading your fantastic stuff, I give you a long review. Funny, because the last thing I want to do right now is write another paper, yet what you write makes me want to write!
"The silence on the way back to Booth's was deafening; his stillness, heart stopping."
(Yes, I start with the first line). Ahhh. The poetry of this line. The structure, the flow, the sound... Specifically the last clause. -sigh-
"Her toast and tea remained untouched. She gave him her full attention, shifting sideways a bit to face him."
It's not like you go into great detail about her turning and facing him on the couch, but I see it. I see how her weight makes the couch dip, especially under that leg she's got up on the couch a little more because of her position. I see both of them sitting. And, sure, you can go ahead and write it off as my imagination, but I refuse. You know why? You set it up. With all the description you gave before this line, you set the scene, both emotionally and physically (setting wise) and so I can see everything clearly (now the rain has gone, lol). Props to you. Maaddd props.
I imagine you're sitting reading this and thinking "WTH."
So, I not only really liked the title of this chapter (before I figured out how it tied in), but I also really like the titular line. It's a good line, a good image.
And then, I mean, you had to have known I was gonna love this: "In the dim light of the room and from the angle of their hands on the side of her stomach he couldn't see where his fingers ended and hers began.
And somehow that seemed fitting."
Because I did.
| Jewelbe11 chapter 5 . 12/9/2011
Okay, so I've fallen WAY behind on my fanfic reading. But chose this one to be the first one I started with. I'm so glad I did. I really enjoyed the story. While I did think that there might be more I loved how you showed how the two of them were able to work through a problem, especially one as big as this one.
| jenlovesbones chapter 4 . 12/6/2011
I thought you ended it in a perfect place. With her knowing him and knowing what he'd need and just being there for him... perfect. You couldn't have made it better by continuing (actually, you probably would have been fine, cause it's you... but the sentiment holds). It was a wonderful place to let go. And nothing in life gets a neat red bow. :)
| wazo29 chapter 5 . 12/6/2011
what a great fic...i loved how you showed their togetherness...as if no problem will ever be too huge that either one of them will back away from it or from each other...i will say again as i have said before-please get a scriptwriters job on bones?..ha! you capture these characters perfectly and i see the scenes running through my head as i'm reading ANY of your fics...i apologise for the delay in my catching up with your story-only life does have a way of catching up with you even with the best-laid plans of several hours of peaceful fanfic indulgence! having a house full of builders tends to put a dampner on the spare time opportunities-plus xmas is on its way! yey!
many thanks xxx
| eitoph chapter 4 . 12/5/2011
I like that you stuck with your original idea. You've confronted the issue you came here to confront, you did it with style and finesse and you don't have to go any further than you intended if that's not where your ideas are taking you. The story you have written is deep and whole and well rounded, so I have no complaints at all with your choice.
Brennan waiting for him outside the meeting was a wonderful moment. I think it gave me hope that I wasn't sure I could have in this scenario - they do still know each other so well. They are a good, balanced couple and I am glad to have taken this chance to explore how that works.
My tardiness with the review is no reflection on my enjoyment - it's fics like these that I always need some time to digest, I always need to be in that perfect space to make sure I say all the right things. Glad to have read this, I just love this take on the gambling storyline.
| jsq chapter 4 . 12/4/2011
This story is getting "favorited." I don't do that so much anymore. I just love the way you handled it. I love that you kept it short. I love that there was an obstacle and that they got right through it and that, while the "potential" will always be there, they'll always know that they can through it. (how's that for a run-on sentence?) Anyway, really, really well done my friend.
| memento1 chapter 5 . 12/3/2011
I loved it. Loved it to itty bitty pieces. You weren't afraid to give them a real, down-and-dirty issue to deal with and not make it all sunshine and roses. What I love the most though is that it's all so believable and in-character. They have problems, they deal with them in an adult matter, and like most adult issues those problems don't just go away. And yes, it makes my heart squeeze to see how much they love each other through all of that. Good writing, good story. I can't wait for more from you!
| loverofbones chapter 5 . 12/2/2011
I really liked your story, it was thought out nicely. In todays sociaty money is a lot of issues in peoples marrages, but it was nice to see them working on the problem together as one and not seperately.
| Baileyjane chapter 5 . 12/2/2011
What? No next chapter?
I am actually okay with that, I think it ended exactly where it should have. More would have been overkill. It was lovely as it was - we don't need to see Booth talk about it with Gordon Gordon, we don't need to see Booth and Brennan talk about it more.
They walk off to face life together - what more can we ask for?
| Baileyjane chapter 4 . 12/2/2011
"He always left a note. It was one of the little things he did that she appreciated more than he probably knew."
SO sweet. Loved that.
"His heart surged in his chest as a smile crossed his face. She was beautiful. He'd always thought so, but now, as he followed her gaze to a mother and little girl walking hand in hand, he was overwhelmed by it. What he had done to deserve her in his life he'd never know, but he was incredibly thankful for her."
Dear Booth, why do you think you don't deserve happiness? It makes me so sad for you.
On to the next chapter...!
| LondonLi chapter 4 . 12/2/2011
Excellent ending to this story. I think you gave us enough closure without ending all the loose ends. That was a great speech by Pops in last night's episode, wasn't it!;) Thanks so much for posting this.
| FaithinBones chapter 5 . 12/2/2011
I liked your story. It seemed true to me. I definitely wasn't disappointed. You're right, life is very messy and some stories cannot end with rainbows and unicorns. I thought you did a very good job; so, please don't second guess your readers. Just write what you feel and most of us will go along for the ride.
| Alexsmom chapter 4 . 12/1/2011
Beautiful! Their each waking up to listen to the other's breathing was so touching. I knew going in it would be a 3 chapter deal - him, her, them. And I thought the ending was wonderful. Like you say, life is messy and there are no perfect endings. But this was perfect in its own way. *cupcakes*
| singer154 chapter 4 . 12/1/2011
This was beautiful. And amazing. Perfect!