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Rabenweise chapter 5 . 3/25
Oh no, my review is too long. I've published it as a 'story' now. Please click at my pen name, you'll find the text on my profile page.
Rabenweise chapter 6 . 3/25
Hello LilaEvansDouble, there you can see my pen name again on one of your review pages. I'm sure you're jumping up and down with joy right now, as criticism tends to bring such levels of pleasure, and I'm a critical reader. I had been adamant about breaking off our dialogue to spare us both the intense emotions, but after I'd slept on my decision, I realised I wouldn't do right by you this way, not really. You see, everyone can use a second opinion sometimes. The human mind is supposed to be free, but actually, it can be quite set in the way it has taken earlier in life, unable to make that crucial lane change by itself and adopt a new perspective. That's why we need life to throw foreign facts and methods of thinking at us now and then. To get to know another viewpoint and to come closer to the ideal that's called truth. So I'll tell you what your second story, "Harry James Potter Dumbledore", has revealed to me so far. Which might become a chaotic venture, because there are so many thoughts flying around in my head right now. I will however try my best to make some sense.

Let's start with beginnings. There's the title of your chapter number six featuring a biblical topos, the paradise. This didn't stand out to me so much at first glance, but delving further into your story and the sixth chapter especially, a range of Christian themes occured to me. The fact that Albus and Minerva must marry prior to adopting a child, tells me that you've had more than just a brush with a certain scripture growing up. The recurring of subjects like gratefulness and innocence supports my theory.
What really caught my eye outright however is the forest expedition playfully undertaken by young Harry. It brought my own youthful adventures to mind at once, both those I embarked on outside and those I wrote down in my notebook. At Harry's age, I had a huge knack for suspense and horror stories. My forests were dark and full of threats. They held all which I feared too much to think about, so my subconscious had to deal with it at night or when I daydreamed. It used my imagination and love for creative hobbies to bring me into touch with the suppressed. It gave the monsters a face and a voice, so they could talk to me at eye level and help me cure that blind spot I had developed. Much later in life, I learned that this was quite a natural thing to happen, that it was something keeping people sane in general. Fears would come up suddenly in the form of symbols, embedded in a forest environment for those who dreamed and invented. The dark forest is an archetype of fear.
It's also a topos appearing in several fairytales such as "Red Riding Hood" and "Hansel and Gretel", the latter of which could be easily associated with your story. I'll explain this more fully later. Now let's get on with the most obvious interpretation of this fiction, the biblical one, and then draw connections to the other two contexts.

In "Harry James Potter Dumbledore", paradise is a property on earth. It features a beautiful landscape including a "small, quaint, one floored cabin" which has furnishings similar to those "in a normal muggle home" and is "not much" overall as mentioned in chapter three. Harry's room in there has a bed and next to it, "still along the wall", is "a matching mahagony desk with a book shelf next to it" so that there isn't "any lower wall space along that wall". It also includes an "armless desk chair" with "a dark blue cushion" on it. You could say it is the picture perfect of modesty and subservience. You may educate yourself, but only if you clutter yourself up with facts so much you won't see the forest for all the trees anymore. You may work, but you will never work through the subjects you encounter, because there is no time and space to take a break and muse about them. Whoever designed and furnished this room took great care to prevent its inhabitant from gaining autonomy. The limbless chair says as much. It is comfortably cushioned and just as nice and "cheery" as the rest of the place to keep Harry all happy and sedated. Humble, fearful, abused little Harry who probably dreamed up hell when faced with another family, one which could easily continue to mistreat him, clearly doesn't expect the cosiness and the permission to ask questions. He himself won't go find answers, though, not if Minerva has a say in the matter: "without questions to answer, we", meaning her and Albus, "would be out of a job", she explains in chapter five. Harry is not encouraged to think for himself in this house. He presumably participated in listing the "Dumbledore House Rules", however the story does not reveal how big his input was. Those rules, a set of twelve instead of ten, takes the place of the Decalogue in this world. As such, Harry's paradise is a rather dogmatic little haven.
As a human being, however, Harry is equipped with a curious and creative mind naturally. It won't be commanded, as he notices in chapter five: "he was quickly losing control of his thoughts again." And again, it happens when he enters the forest. "Once outside Harry let his imagination run wild." Harry decides that he is "an explorer to study the wild life." His educational trip leads him away from the forest trail trampled into the ground by Dumbledore and his ancestors. It's inside the headmaster's property after all, so it could be assumed it was the adult authority figures who stamped out the pathway. Harry leaves this old way for the sake of foreign experiences and new knowledge. He breakes the rule his soon to be guardians have made. What ensues is a seeming transcending of humanity as Harry practically flies through the air, jumping from one tree branch to the next, "not even letting his feet touch the ground". This brings Brecht's "Schneider von Ulm" to mind, a poem about a tailor who tries to soar up from a church roof with a selfmade flying machine, failing miserably, but certainly the biblical Fall of Man must be associated also. Because Harry does have a lapse in judgement, he does fall to the floor. There's at least one tree involved in the mishap and once stated that Harry is "lost", the imagery gets so ridiculously obvious that I must ask myself if you'd deliberately staged this chapter as a reflection of the Fall. The death Harry is afraid his guardian will bring upon him, the light which precedes the woman's appearance, so strange and unreal, markes her as a goddess. She punishes her charge promptly and later again in the cabin. So far the story seems to agree with the context nicely. It's commonly consented to that the exceeding of one's nature, seeking godhead, is a bad thing to do - Christians believe that eating from the tree of knowledge for that reason brought death into being. It also came with other perceived penalties, such as hard work and giving birth to children while in pain. The devil lurks however in the details, as is often the case.
For starters, we can see in several places throughout the story that Harry's adults are not perfect. Dumbledore openly admits to being "wrong now and then" and Minerva, the temperamental "Dragon Lady", does not resemble an angel either, so to say. Both fellows need time to ponder and talk through the directives they list in order to find an acceptable set of twelve, rules meant for the entire family, rules which they don't adhere to when it comes to the crunch. Once the boughs are broken and the lapse has happened, Harry loses all right to respect under the adults. It is true that he failed his pledge to Minerva also, as he had agreed not to stray from the path laid out for him - the forest rule had been thought up in a group discussion - but it is unclear, again, how much say the boy is granted in such a bout. Looking at wearing-the-breeches Minerva McGonagall, we can guess who is in charge there. It is probable she just forced her rule on Harry without a true chance of rejection. Harry might have voiced protest at it, since it's a pure restriction lacking obvious benefits for him, contrary to the rule of respect. So the order to follow the way seems lighter on consent than the House Rule of respecting each other. Also, Harry disobeys the forest order in the rush of wonder, being "entertained", and regrets his actions at once - whereas Minerva, though sighing heavily as heard in chapter six, chooses an impious deed against the child premeditatedly while seemingly being in control of her emotions. Her tone is "firm, but not angry". The question remaines wether she manages to clear her inner turmoil prior to the decision. She appears much calmer and rational than Harry during the act of disobedience, however, on the outside. Something still weights on her heart, an emotion not hostile to Harry, but is it guilt? "She sighed. She didn't want to do this. She was getting too old, and Harry had behaved so well the past two weeks." Her thoughts disclose doubts about the fairness of her intentions. Her charge didn't cross her rules before, so she now asks herself if she should act as crassly. The prospect of punishing Harry causes her pain, so she will know at a certain level that her doings won't be received with cheers - yet she stops at this vague concern, she does not get to the bottom of the issue. Why might Harry dislike the punishment? Minerva will never know; she deems herself incapable of solving the conflict between her principles and empathy. Hence, the touch of guilt she feels stays hidden beneath the surface of old habits. "You broke the rules, and now you have to face the consequences." This is how Minerva works, how she has been indoctrinated. She must react to disobediance and what her reaction will turn out to be is settled as well. We see her and Albus confering about the matter at hand, but judging from the conversation's shortness and her confident demeanour afterwards, there was no deep pondering involved. "[...] I have no qualms about spanking children when they deserve it", Minerva say
Guest chapter 5 . 2/24
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Aubrey Mills chapter 2 . 1/24
I'm glad Harry didn't have to go with Snivelus, I mean, he'd be a derpy death eater then... Or at least would actually been put in Slytherin.
Aubrey Mills chapter 1 . 1/24
I really think this should've happened in the books.
lilyflower101 chapter 21 . 1/18
I don't think that its Harry and Daniel that the parents will be mad at. Harry and Daniel didn't know that the arty was for adults only or that the eggnog had alcohol in it.
kittyranma chapter 21 . 12/22/2014
I'm enjoying this story I hope that the author gets the muze back.
Genuine-Muggle-Hater chapter 21 . 11/11/2014
I love this story! And I love mini-drunk-Harry! I have a feeling that Minerva and Albus are going to kill him, even though he had no idea what was going on...
quztuk chapter 1 . 10/27/2014
CP often stands for child pornography.
FYI
Mcat chapter 21 . 10/18/2014
In one of the upcoming chapters I'd love to see Harry slip up and call Dumbledore "dad." Hoping for an update soon!
wandamarie chapter 20 . 9/15/2014
Wow it was a good chapter
wandamarie chapter 21 . 9/15/2014
Please up date loved it
Lilykees chapter 21 . 8/20/2014
I just found and read this story straight through and loved it. I hope you continue with it.
anyeshabaner chapter 4 . 7/26/2014
i love your story trouble wit polyjuice..and this one is so much more awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
wwwendy chapter 21 . 5/1/2014
I do find it a little strange that not a single adult noticed or commented on the kids being there. And especially that they didn't let hp leave when he wanted to.
That being said, I hope Harry doesn't get into trouble. He didn't know it was adult only
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