Reviews for Finding Family
K. M. Donovan chapter 16 . 2/17/2020
...too short. seriously, most of harry's hogwarts years could be covered in the amount of chapters you have written, if you would actually write more in them. they don't need to be epic in length, just decent. at best these are quick drabbles. and at the rate the story is going, we will be in chapter 200 before the fic is anywhere near complete. i would recommend 2-5'000 words per chapter. it may sound like a lot, but i can average 3'000 words in half an hour when the story starts flowing. the actual writing of the chapters is not likely to take very long. and if it does? then you are fighting the story rather then letting it flow.

honestly, EDITING is what should be taking the most time.

you started this fic in 2011, it is now 2020. you have written 16 chapters, and only 14'000 words. that isnt even 1'000 words a chapter on average. and considering your choice of content? harry potter and Marvel comics? that is way too little to really get any kind of following.

those are both MASSIVE franchises, and this is actually a very intriguing story concept. so in order to appeal to your target audience? you are going to need to put a LOT of work into this.

hell, i could probably put the entirety of this fic with more detail, into 3 chapters. and in less then a quarter of the time it has taken you to write this.

writing is not hard people. you take an idea, and you run with it. you follow where the STORY takes you. yes you try to guide the plot. but in the end the story will write itself. and if you fight the plot to try and make it go the way YOU want? you will end up with a short, jerky, and overall sub-par mess. i should know, as it has happened to me many times.

i am not saying you lack talent. because even from what little you have written, the talent is there. what you seem to lack is motivation, and a desire to put EFFORT into your story. and it comes across in your writing.

there is potential here, but as this fic currently stands? it is being squandered.

that is my opinion on this fic. it needs work, but with some effort? this could be an amazing fic. right now it is very sub-par.

thank you for your time.
wandamarie chapter 5 . 1/30/2020
wandamarie chapter 4 . 1/30/2020
Nice job
wandamarie chapter 3 . 1/30/2020
Thank you
wandamarie chapter 2 . 1/30/2020
Oh my
wandamarie chapter 1 . 1/30/2020
Good start to a good story
KillgarraghForever chapter 13 . 6/28/2019
Hogwarts will play host to the Avengers!
KillgarraghForever chapter 1 . 6/28/2019
Oh. My. God.
andjelija.nenic chapter 8 . 6/14/2019
Update more chapters about this story,because it's the best,extra and the great story that I was reading about it,and I am also starting to love and to like reading to this story. So can you please write more chapters,because I want to know what happens in the next chapters about it. THANKS SO MUCH FOR WRITTEN TO THIS STORY,thanks so much about it.&&&£££%%%$$$
kat chapter 1 . 5/21/2019
Am I really the only one who wonders what happened to angry duck Voldy?

Great story. Gave me some nice laughs :).
deathwearsblack chapter 16 . 5/18/2019
please update when you can.
Guest chapter 9 . 5/14/2019
HarryMarvelFan chapter 10 . 5/10/2019
If you do decide to continue, would Harry-Loki meet Lady Sif and the Warriors Three at one point? I’d like to see the four warriors when they see Loki as a child again.
Faeyre chapter 1 . 4/30/2019
Doctor Who XD I was watching it the entire week
sexy Seren chapter 2 . 4/29/2019
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