Reviews for On the Herding Behavior of Ponies
anonymous1201 chapter 2 . 3/6
Twilight is and alicorn? When was this made? Cause this isnow Canon
Gnarled Bone chapter 7 . 9/10/2013
Are you dead? :\
SailorNova007 chapter 5 . 1/26/2013
still waiting for an update
Jiopaba chapter 7 . 1/22/2013
Oh my gawd this was so weird but utterly delightful. Poor Rarity...

The whole story so far was just beautiful. I dearly hope this isn't dead, given how long it's been since it updated.

It's like... I didn't even 'know' it was possible to write what is basically a harem-fic and have it be just overflowing with WAFF. I feel like I want to run out and give someone a hug right now, it was just fantastic. Sweet without being sappy.
Alex DarkFire chapter 7 . 8/27/2012
I have to admit, I've probably read and reread this more times then any other story I've come across in a long time, its all in all a very enjoyable read, nice pacing, good ideas and well thought out interactions, nice world building as well.

I for one do hope we will see more of it in the future, hopefully sooner rather then later
Rubel chapter 7 . 8/7/2012
Cool. Very well written and I do love the characterization. Keep up the great work.
Blackfox Nightengale chapter 1 . 7/25/2012
This is an amazing peice of work. I honestly hope to see part two soon.
Civille chapter 1 . 4/12/2012
I plan on reading the rest of this, but I just wanna say how beautiful that singing scene was. I wish she had remembered the song... I would've liked to know how it went.

There are a few grammar/pony things I noticed, and I thought I'd point them out, if you don't mind of course.

As the afternoon moved to early evening, and business picked back up, Twilight left her friend to her work, and headed back to the library, a spring in her step and a song in her heart.

Too many commas. Try removing the one after 'evening' and the one after 'work'.

"Pinkie Pieā€¦ are you alright."

Should be a '?' right?

pulled Pinkie Pie into her arms, whispering an apology for scaring the younger mare. Twilight smiled, and set the packages down next to them.

Two things- ponies don't have arms, and try taking out the comma after 'smiled'. You can say forehooves or just hooves.

smiling bravely at the woman she considered a second mother,

Not woman- mare.

Also, at the end when Pinkie licked Twilight's nose, Twilight was surprisingly unresponsive. Was nose-licking just normal behavior? You'd think she'd be a bit more freaked out.

Anyways, I'm going to see how all this goes and continue reading.
Completelyawesome43 chapter 2 . 4/11/2012
Can someone please tell me what granny pie looked like or was even mentioned in the show?
Wing Zero 032 chapter 1 . 3/13/2012
Seriously, when will this story will continue(being updated) or when will you post the secuel?
omnixxx chapter 7 . 2/27/2012
Hey man are you going to update this 100% original masterpeice or is it on hiatus? I have followed this since the day it was posted, it is saved in my fav bar and I check it every week so an update on your progress would nice.
SailorNova007 chapter 7 . 1/20/2012
this is absolutely brilliant so far hope you update soon
Completelyawesome43 chapter 1 . 12/21/2011
chapters 1 and 2 were spectacular, good job.
Fireflutterpony chapter 7 . 12/15/2011
Really enjoying this story so far. Harem-shipping is a natural match for a setting about talking ponies, and I've enjoyed the way you've let it roll out fairly naturally.

Now, for nitpicking!

Applejack got very little spotlight time during the first arc. Is this intentional because of intended spotlight time later, or did she just get overlooked?

At the start of chapter 5, you gloss over a meeting between the Mane 6 minus Twilight where they level with each other about their feelings for Twilight. It feels like a missed opportunity to elaborate on the non-Twilight members of the herd, and specifically where they stand with one another. Have you given any thought to fleshing that out?
MasterWriter37 chapter 7 . 12/9/2011
A cute little ending to this...arc, as I guess it is. I was slightly confused when Luna considered Twilight a little sister, when they had been flirting just a while back. I'm guessing that was just because Twilight had wings at the moment. Eh, whatever; it's totally adorable anyway! I can't wait for the next part; this part was amazing.
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