|Reviews for Chocolat|
| cellaria chapter 1 . 11/1/2013
hmm well i don't think this should be rated M at all.. they're hardly doing anything & even that isn't super obvious lol it was still written very nicely but i think they should've actually slept together. i thought your 'answer me' fic was done really well.. but it was also rather depressing (i didn't even know he turned into a demon in the anime until i read it- that sucks) lol & i much prefer the lighter tone this one has & i mostly only like stories where they do like each other. obviously i think they look beautiful together but i wasn't sure about this pairing for a while & i don't like some people's interpretation of them or how they write the sex/relationship.. they often lean towards one or the other feeling or controlling everything & stuff seems very one sided. the way you described how they felt & their restrained passion was so good & seemed more on equal ground than i've usually seen so i think you would've written it perfectly & in a way i would really like.
| Hitomi-chanchan chapter 1 . 1/16/2012
god dammit i just love everything you write. And when ever i picture or draw ciel in his night clothes of course it has to be almost exactly what you described. I personally think sometimes he does wear Sebastian's shirts for no obviously exploited reason (to the not yaoi fangirl of course. and all the chocolate and word play was amazing, as usual.
| Rhea D.E chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
THAT WAS THE BIGGEST TEASE I HAVE EVER READ! loved every second of it.
| Unamused Elipsis chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
An excellent story. I greatly enjoyed the way you captured the interaction between Ciel and Sebastian. Their interplay in the dialogue was wonderful. So many people let the established relationship break down and totally lose the characters. You hit it right on the head, and I think that's pretty difficult to do with Sebastian. He's a complex character to write. Anyway, I loved it. Please :) write another in the same vein and style.
| CHOCOLATCHOCOLATCHOCOLAT chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
This is so beautiful! You HAVE to write another chapter or a sequel called "Caramel"; this story is just so amazingly well done and captivating! The words are sweet and poetic and flow so gracefully that you can practically feel the emotion and unresolved sexual tension in the air; it's as though the scene is happening before your eyes! You really have an wonderful writing gift here, so don't let it go to waste, m'kay? ;)
We really look up to writers like you; this story is just soooo addicting and breath-taking! Trust me when I say that not many people can pull this off, so you really must have talent! Keep it up!
| paintedbright chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
I'm so glad you are still writing for this pairing! The chemistry you create between Ciel and Sebastian is always marvelous and you keep them IC well even though it is AU. My heart wrenched at the "tell him tell him tell him" part and when Sebastian said stop, these poor things.
Please keep up the good work! Also I am looking forward to the next chapter of Pomme whenever you are inspired to continue!
| Neneko chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
SO. MUCH. BEAUTY. OMG.
*clutches chest* my heart...! This was so worth it. It's worth all the waiting. It's so beautiful, I can't- 333
You know I love you, yes? Yes? Good, because I... oh my God...
...can I kidnap you and keep you as my writer? Yes?
I adored everything about it. Every single thing. Every single word was so well chosen, every single paragraph was different from the others, the dialogue was beautifully in character for both the original manga and Phobia, the sexy taim, everything!
You're right, it's different from the first two stories in terms of atmosphere and mood, but that doesn't ruin anything! It's just adding to your skill, you know xD You're able to describe completely different atmospheres with so much ease and so naturally, it's beautiful!
Oh, and speaking of beautiful- this was so sensual. This was beyond anything I imagined. Seriously. This story is the definition of sensuality. Your choice of words, the describtions, the dialogue, the flirting, the changes of mood and... that evil ending XD It was so very Phobia-esque, haha. You're beating me at my own game, girl! How mean! xD
But soon, there shall be the porn chapter.. oh yeah.
May I add that I really adore the way you describe things? Sorry for being redundant here, but I just need to tell you this: You always find the right words and the right amount of describing a scene or a sensation or an appearance. I think this is something really tricky and you need lots of talent for this in order to do it right. I've read tons of books from authors whose major characteristic was their love for blooming describtions and to be honest, after all those describtions, I forgot what they had wanted to say in the first place. Their choice of words was excellent, their vocabulary very rich and high class, but their words were not linked with each other. They were seperate and it was hard (at least for me it was) to keep the general sense in mind after chains and chains of describtions. But here, everything fits so well, everything goes so well together like puzzle pieces from one word to the next, linked together like chains, they're not seperate words, they are all linked to form one giant piece of sensuality and beauty and mind numbing awesomeness and you're creating pictures in my head with such ease, it's beautiful x3
I. LOVE. THIS. SO. VERY. MUCH.
And I fail to express my love for this properly xD I'm sounding like an orgasming, hysteric fangirl ...and I don't really care! xD
I'm so happy you found the time to write this! I haven't heard from you for so long, I was afraid you would be mad at me for some reason D: BUT TO KNOW YOU'RE NOT MADE MY DAY! IT REALLY DID! EVERYTHING WAS FUCKED UNTIL I GOT YOUR MAIL. Then everything was beautiful again x3
Again, thank you so much! And I shall add this to the file on my computer which features your stories x3 *copypaste* muhahaha.
Enjoy your day and write me soon, if you wish! I'd love to hear from you again! :'D Maybe we could get to know each other a little bit better, if you'd like x3
| L chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
I reaaaaaaaaaaally really really loved this! please continue!... if you don't... you shouldn't suprised if you find that your family slowly disappears... Looking forward to the new chapter :)
| promocat chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
such a lovely game of sex & choc.!
| justfalling chapter 1 . 11/21/2011
| crazychick16 chapter 1 . 11/21/2011
OMG THERE HAS TO BE MORE! please write more god,this makes me want chocolate so bad. yummy