|Reviews for Friendly Trees|
| Gunner659 chapter 1 . 3/6
"Other side of her dorm was empty as of yet"
I would think dorm room would work better.
"Barely managing not to sign in relief"
Perhaps 'sigh' would be more correct?
"The looks they shot at her were deteriorating"
The last word just can't be what you were trying for!
"Then he walked into the gym"
Who is 'he'? It takes several lines to find out. Doesn't feel right.
| James Axelrad chapter 1 . 1/24/2012
| pokermind chapter 1 . 1/13/2012
Overall very good the subject was interesting and over all flowed well. It could use some fleshing out, but as a short story not bad. I liked it. PM