|Reviews for A Spatial Tear|
| Jeh.Cerbie chapter 16 . 6/29/2013
So I've never really done this before, but I figured I should let you know that while you have decided to rewrite your story, I will still be on this side waiting patiently for the new changes... I hope that did not sound odd But I do read this story so I'm happy to know you're continuing it!
| Yue Asuka chapter 16 . 6/28/2013
ouch... sad... after this long T.T
i hope it wont take too long for the remake to be posted. i miss your story TT anyway good luck on it.
| brica chapter 15 . 1/26/2013
I really like this story.
By the way, there are some chapters where the *mindspeech* is indistinguishable from standard narration (meaning that the *things* that you put around the *mindspeech* just wouldn't show up or were simply absent)... just thought I'd let you know.
I also thought the ever-changing POV was somewhat hard to keep track of at times, honestly, thought most of the time it was okay (the hard times are when you spend a whole lot of time in the third person, and the come back to using first person; then I'd have to take a moment to try and remember who's POV it was... I think it would be somewhat easier if the third-person speech was different for each POV (with the whole "different people see things in a different light" thing, and stuff, you know?), or if you could at least make an effort to use the POV of someone who participates a lot so readers could REMEMBER who it is that doing the narration, though I realize that might be hard to do... thankfully, I never had to go back to the announcement for the POV change and could piece together relatively easily who was narrating with the line after, or something, but it's just that the pause got on my nerves a little... well more like the lost feeling that came with it did, but same difference).
Oh, and you might want to be careful with Kairi; the way you set her up, I'd have almost thought she could do most anything... like at Akzeriuth, I'd thought Van wouldn't cause much problem (I'm talking about the part where she was making a level reference in the game-timeline)... it's like, whenever there's a fight that she loses in, you deliberately make a poor description of it, making the readers feel kinda lost as to how she actually got defeated in a "no way SHE could have lost, of all people"-like way. Just make sure she doesn't come off as being too close to being godlike in the future, seeing as, to me, you're threading on thin enough ice already on this matter, okay?
| Guest chapter 15 . 12/19/2012
what with the kingdom hearts characters
| AnimeLover and Dr. Tom ZX chapter 15 . 12/10/2012
Like the story.
I read the first season, and please continue the Fanfic
| Frio chapter 15 . 11/25/2012
sync is far too ooc and i have read the prequel of this one which make me become sure that sync ooc i can no longer see him as sync but an ocs named sync if you want to say he's change because of the journey then you develop his chatacter too fast. and are you trying to make a toa and kh crossover or xion and roxas just appear as cameo?
| Yue Asuka chapter 15 . 11/21/2012
i want to review on the last chap but.. i dont want to spam your notification with my not-so-good comment. im sorry
but congratulation for wining the match! :D
and i wonder what does the dreams of sync did ion and sync exchange position? O_O if yes i wonder how it would be since ion side bangs longer than sync
also i see a cameo from KH here XDa *is been obsessed with vanitas from BBS because his similiar personality with sync*
that from me and i hope you update soon. thank you for the story :D
| DanteShindo chapter 15 . 11/21/2012
Yay! Xion made a cameo appearance! But… how the heck does Sync know Roxas?
| azure blue espeon chapter 15 . 11/21/2012
Sorry about not reviewing. I'm just not a frequent reviewer. Though I always read your story.
| Yue Asuka chapter 14 . 10/6/2012
;A; *sobs sobs* it so sad to hear a long delay but... november is just 1 month ahead! so ill sit here properly while waitung for you :3 as long as you promises me to continue this and not abandoned it forever.. i read too many great storry stoped on the middle way ;A; *sobs again*
| Yue Asuka chapter 13 . 8/29/2012
finnaly i understand about second plane yeah! XD thats cool and sync have Talent o.o awesome x3
about the pairing actually i prefer sync and kairi but when i re-read all the chapt again the one who has a deeper feeling to her is asch *otl* need scene sync and kairi more *whine* ;A;
*cough* back to business. this story become more interesting in every chapther and i love it not only the word leght but also the story and everything on it! sorry for cant give you an advice or criticue or everyting that you need all i can give is just a support and cheer you ftom here TT ganbarimasu
and thank you very much for the awesome story XD
*im random today? must be because too much soda*
| Soulgain chapter 12 . 8/20/2012
mmm...Good chapter,like always. I don't see any grammar error and I like Kairi berserk mode xD. Sorry for any grammar error,english is not my strong point so I usually don't review stuff but your fic is a special luck in school
| Yue Asuka chapter 12 . 8/18/2012
Um.. When they go into second plane do you forgot to uses " "" " to separated action and talk or it's my mobile who's error? or it's in purpose? .a
Zion with braid... '-'a i really dying to know how he would looks like XD *super curious about it*
ps: pssst.. my school also start in monday here
| Yue Asuka chapter 11 . 8/18/2012
Do you found the God Generals room after spending an hour wandering on the cathedral? O_O *is curious about it* And as for your question, no you never And sure waiting is indeed bored but it's worth for the story that you wrote :D
And for hyperresonance, i wonder how Largo would end up there also in fact i'm still confused about it. Because as fas as i know largo is not a seventh fonist ;a but well, let see where this story will explained it XD
thank you for the chapters as always :D
| Tea-chan chapter 11 . 7/29/2012
I personally can't wait to see the results. I will admit that I'm normaly used to OC's being paired with canons, but I honestly don't mind SI either. And you're doing a GREAT job so far with this story. (Don't worry about what other people think, okay?)
Anon: That is your opinion. I honestly find it quite irritating when someone tells an author not to do something because they think that it's just SO WRONG and that the author should NEVER do it. The author can do what they want to because it's their story. Do keep an open mind, please.