|Reviews for How HP and the DH should have Ended|
| LJ Summers chapter 1 . 23h
This works for me. :)
| Stormbow chapter 1 . 4/30
Much better. Thank you.
| EndlessChains chapter 1 . 4/16
A interesting story. This was a very interesting ending to the Harry Potter series and quite liked how it all ended up. A lot of events took place with Ron dying and almost all the Horcruxes destroyed. The speech made by Harry was well done and sent a message that it was kill or be killed durin the war and there was really no time for mercy if the enemy was merciless to begin with. Amsuing to see the Death Eaters in shock when the killing curse were shot by the Light side and taking them all down. The converstIon with Dumbledore was hilarious with his talk of taking the wrong path by Harry but glad Lily showed up and pushed Harry in the right direction. Less casualties and much romance between Hamrony. Nicely done and enjoyable to read. Thank you. Keep up the good work.
| doubledamn chapter 1 . 3/31
Did anyone else cheer when Ron left the tent? And did anyone else cry out in frustration when he came back? Damn you Rowling. Damn you.
Harmony Ship for life.
| dogbertcarroll chapter 1 . 3/20
Good ending. Just lacks a little something... OK, I really wanted to know what Albus' punishment would be.
| The Ghostly Minion chapter 1 . 2/7
A great, fantastic story. There are two quotes that inform this story. The first is from the movie 'Patton:
Patton: Now I want you to remember that no bastard ever won a war by dying for his country. He won it by making the other poor dumb bastard die for his country.
The second is paraphrased very slightly from the M*A*S*H episode, 'Sometimes you hear the bullet':
Henry Blake: ...Look, all I know is what they taught me at command school. There are certain rules about a war. And rule number one is PEOPLE (young men) die. And rule number two is, WIZARDS AND WITCHES (doctors) can't change rule number one (original text inside parens)
There is so much wrong in the canon battle. Harry does not! vanquish Voldemort, V's own reflected spell did so. Harry ends a war and does not kill anyone, excepting Quarrel in PS and the Basilisk in CoS. Hardly seems possible, with all the death he experiences
Seasoned, sociopathic killers, who'd already killed some 40 men, women and children in the battle, simply stop and surrender when Voldemort goes down, go off meekly and are never heard from again? In canon the only DE I remember being killed in the Battle for Hogwarts is Bellatrix.
This makes much better tale and is truly the way the war should have ended.
The epilogue is fine. Hermione as Muggle Studies Professor, is OK; as History, Charms or Transfiguration Professor, even better.
Another treat for the readers. Thanks.
D. Page Robin
| Miladheth Aldaloth chapter 1 . 1/27
| WhiteElfElder chapter 1 . 1/23
Not bad; definitely a better way to have dealt with it...but I think JKR is Albus in disguise for the way the original was written.
| ArcanePracti-cat chapter 1 . 10/13/2014
...I honestly... LOVE THIS ENDING. xD hahaha, I actually really like hermione/harry- I also don't really get why he ended up with Ginny... :P
I like how Lily turned up at King's Cross! And how they dealt with the death eaters, just BLAM- it's not like they're going to do that to everyone, but it was a war, and even muggles' wars involve BOTH sides killing each other! ...Well, anyway, so long as the killing curse is only for incidents like wars, I like your ending here! It was awesome and sweet! :D
Thanks for your work. :D
| chris.depalmayahn chapter 1 . 9/21/2014
I loved the arguement between Harry and Dumbledore. Harry was right. If this was muggle war Dumbledore would arm his army with pea shooters. Loved this one shot. Thank you sharing
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/22/2014
A good ending, but no, not a better ending. I like your writing but ugh, ditch the "here's how it SHOULD'VE gone" tone, very unattractive in fanfiction. If you truly think you can write better than JKR you need to come up with your own characters and situations and write something entirely original.
| corwyn chapter 1 . 8/21/2014
Well done. I agree, a more fitting ending than the original.
| Red Lily1 chapter 1 . 7/24/2014
I loved that SO much. Especially Lily's bit-she put Dumbledore in his place very well. But even though I KNOW what happens even though I KNOW he lives, after it said "there was a flash of green, and everything was gone", I started crying. Can't help it. I love Harry too much.
| YaGHeofttHaeLubvit216 chapter 1 . 7/20/2014
Very well done!
Having DD still spouting his abfall about redemption was a very nice touch.
I actually haven't yet gotten through the books to the end. I borrowed the set from my younger daughter but got pulled into fanfiction and now read that almost exclusively.
Still and all, I can't think how the ending could have been any better.
Thank you so much for sharing your efforts.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/1/2014
Jupp, a much better ending ;)