|Reviews for Our Story|
| Shijiro chapter 1 . 12/4/2011
nice little one-shot
but couple mistakes story-wise
one everyone except goku was wished back after the cell incident, so videl's mom should have died another way otherwise she'd still be alive
and two the cell jr. came out before goku sacrificed himself. they were already beating on the z fighters when hercule threw android 16's head and gohan ascended to ssj2 which in turn knocked the camera out, so thats were the real footage ends
but otherwise great story
| gue22 chapter 1 . 12/1/2011
pretty good kay, i really enjoyed it. i felt like you rushed the ending though, and at the point where gohan started gritting his teeth, i thought he went from perfectly in character to pretty out of character. i think if you had taken the time to explain his emotions at the time of watching the false re-enactment of the cell games at the movies, that way, giving the reader a glimpse of the build up of his anger, that then, the last scene would have been more likely.
still, wow, you're definately on point, and I'm glad I got to catch this and read it without being in the 'beta and edit mode'
| ultranx chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
um, the cell jr.s came before goku sacrificed himself. gohan turned super saiyan 2 and destroyed them, then he got overconfident, cell tried the blow up the earth, goku sacrificed himself, cell is revived stronger, both cell and gohan fire kamehamehas, vegeta distracts cell, gohan overpowers cell destroying him. good story anyways.
| OrangeStarExpress chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
Daaaammmmnnnn grandbabeh, it would have been interesting to see what would have happened if you continued it :) Really good though.
| MRMenaMRM chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
That was awsome! U need to make another chpt! Please? I wanna fund out what happens when everyone funds out the truth!:]