Again you have smart people acting lube retards. You are a shitty writer if this all you can manage. Skimmed most of this chapter because the bouncing perspectives was annoying as hell. It was completely unnecessary. Your focus on fighting instead of good plot has ruined this story.

Retarded. No excuse for your stupid plot decisions. Your delusional if you think these so called twists were clever. You are obviously listening to fellow retards.

Of course nobody could guess how you were going to do it. You’re a retard. Retarded people often have retarded reasons that make no sense to anyone but themselves since their brain is broken. Following canon events even with all the changes proves you are stupid.

Naruto is a pussy. He is the nine tail. Why is he fucking passing out after the one tail or two tail fight. There should be no comparison in power. Again you are dumbing shit down for stupid pointless drama and fights that would only happen if everyone was stupid.

So Jiraya Betrayed Naruto yet again and lied right to his face. I’m glad that perverted subhuman trash is going to die. Hopefully after a long drawn out torture session where he realizes how utterly he has failed his village, his Sensei, and his godson. Then hopefully Minato and Kushina will break him totally so he’s not even human anymore. Kakashi is the only one who deserves worse in canon.

Another idiotic chapter. Please stop dumbing down your characters to advance plot. You have established that Naruto is not stupid, yet you have him suddenly become brainless to have shit happen. That’s either you are just not very skilled at plot progression or you yourself are an idiot and are not capable of higher thought processes.

And here is an underlying problem I have with all Naruto stories including this one and canon. They are ninja. It is beyond stupid to share your techniques information. I don’t care if it is a friend or ally. They say all the time that in the ninja world your enemy can turn ally and vice a versa. Sharing your info is just plain retarded. There are no excuses for this shear stupidity. And all of the succeeding authors just copy this stupidity. Grow the fuck up. Yelling your moves and sharing critical information is the exact opposite of what ninjas would do. Just another moron writer.

Tsubame is a worthless pathetic drunk. She should never become hokage. The fourth is a fucking senile moron. Can’t finish the snake bastard, betrays Naruto, and picks a worthless alcoholic as his replacement. Pathetic.

Man already on the Bingo book at the age of 12-15? Now that is a accomplishment I love and seriously love this fanfic already its good the progress is nice and the character development is good and I give it a 5/5 in my book so yeah love it!

Put the lemon back in, FF isn't as sanctimonious as it used to be. If it was then for example Noodlehammer's stories would've never survived on this site.

It wasn't Kishimoto's sexism, but Shikamaru's. Shikamaru has always been male chauvinistic throughout the series, and since he was the platoon leader...

Lion King's roar? Does that have any relation with Fire Dragon's roar?

just got on to chapter 23 and so far I've had a grand time reading this. great story

The fight seen is good and the wind thing is believable

J'aurais aimé quil ai aussi l'invocation des crapeaux pour pouvoir le transmettre à ses enfants.