|Reviews for The Acute Mastery of Potions|
| Gender Outlaw chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Well, I've got to admit - that IS different from your other stories. But then, not in a bad way. No, not in a bad way at all.
I think, in Crowbar was it? There was a somewhat angsty/dramatic scene with Lupin's death. But, the talent of writing has definitely changed since then. (Not that either that, or this, is in any way bad or worse than the other.) But it's good! I really kind of think so.
You can tell, on the first chapter, whether or not a story is going to be engaging. I was just musing on this the other day actually - having been snagged on one within the first paragraph, and barely able to finish another's first page. But this engaging and I want more. Hah, who wouldn't?
Of course one must wonder if the name on the paper was Snape's - but then again, it would be even more interesting if it wasn't. It could have been that Lily didn't have Potter's son, but that's not what interesting me at all. I think the thought of that, of everything being as what we know, of James and Lily's son, but - something else on that paper. Something that we don't know and can't see that puts Snape at unrest.
Maybe it's just because Harry is searching for relatives. Maybe, on the other side, he thinks Harry is just up to no good looking for someone else to further his fame - that thought flitted through my mind as I read past. I like this story.
I like the depth you're putting to it in such a short space - I fell right into it. I like the smallness of what we've seen being Harry brewing potions, then getting caught by Snape, and then potentially being late for Snape's class. Or I could be judging too quickly, him falling asleep on his potion's text. He did bring it down to be able to brew afterall, didn't he?
But, this was fun. I loved Hermoine's need to learn what they skipped over, and wonder slightly why the material was jumped. And, it was interesting. It was a very good start! A great beginning.
It amuses me, hearing Snape say he'd take no more than fifty points off to the hidden student snuck into his classroom. I wonder if he really didn't know it was Harry hiding there - where there really that many places to conceal himself?
So! I liked it. It was very fun, yes. Thank you for posting it. You should listen to your friend more, haha!
| Zaion Indulias chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Two to one odds on the paper revealing that Snape is Harry's father.
Three to one odds it revealed that Sirius is the daddy.
100 to 1 odds that Voldemort is Harry's dad.
Further odds shall be posted as potential fathers come forward.
| Crocs chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
I love it!
| tati1 chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Poor Harry. You conveyed his loneliness quite well.
I find it highly suspicious they skipped that potion the year Harry took the class. What else did they skip?
| FoschiaFreak-17 chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
I like it so far! can't wait to see what the sheet said.
| DevilCharms chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
This is good! Please update (:
| Bobboky chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
| MomochiNaruto chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Very few fics where Harry is a relative of Snape are any good. I hope that isn't what you are doing.
| TheKryptioner chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
I totally love this and I need the next chapter, like, seriously. (:
| leoparddancehotmail.com chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
What do I think? I think I want to read moar. Ahh, the quiet, private and slightly desperate planning Harry executed was wonderful. The answers on that sheet of paper are so much more than just words or paper to him and it shows. I think you've got 13 year old Harry down. He didn't get really hot headed until his fourth or fifth year really. Desperate though...
I like. Not quite sure where you are going with it and the relatives thing, but I am facinated so far. Slightly sneaky, desperate, not even mentioning his quiet little hope to his bff's Harry has caught my attention. I sense juicy bits ahead.
As far as a critical review goes, this felt more like a single scene than a chapter, but I am overly fond of longfic, so take that with a grain of salt. That's really it. I didn't see any glaring typos or anything. Nothing else I can really say until there is more... *unsubtle* :) I would enjoy seeing more. No pushiness intended.
| Wonderbee31 chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Good start with this, and can't wait to see what all happens next time with Harry and what all Snape will be thinking of next time.
| Cassia4u chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
you are a very talented writer, great chapter, please keep writing! :D
| stealacandy chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
I reall, really do hope this isn't an excuse for a Snape-is Harry's-father story. They really, really do suck. Snape sucks in general, so it's no surprise.
| Rori Potter chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Poor Harry. Is Severus the relative? Update soon.
| Tryptophan36 chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
Interesting! I look forward to seeing where this is going. Severitus?