|Reviews for Graceful Degradation|
| engkeat.goh chapter 14 . 2/4
| Guest chapter 15 . 2/4
Man, this is such a great story
Please continue with it
| Baughn chapter 15 . 1/16
Well, this is interesting. Let me try to dissect the scenario...
The book of darkness is still eating Hayate. I think I can ignore the possibility that it'll just kill her, so that leaves... it might fully power up. In that case, they're all dead; with the TSAB being temporarily out of reach, the arc-en-ciel is not an option, and they don't have nearly the firepower they did in As anyway. That option is also out.
Third option, then. They're going to stop the defense program from activating in the first place. Yuuno will do his best, but if it was that simple Graham would have considered it a possibility. So let's see, what do they have not that the TSAB does *not* have...
You made a point of bringing up the internet, and pointing out that even Midchilda doesn't have anything close to our level of infrastructure. More importantly, that likely means they don't have anywhere close to our level of online warfare either; we've had a weapons race of defense versus offense for the last several decades, which has produced some truly prodigious talents and techniques.
The book of darkness is basically a computer. The defense program is... well, it wasn't originally *intended* to do what it's doing, even by the guy who wrote it; that would be silly. It's not a very well-written program, and that certainly means there'll be security holes. And they've got months.
Yuuno won't know how to deal with it, but... Arisa was the daughter of the owners of a large software company, wasn't she? Right. I'd say she'd be able to find someone who *can*. Of course, doing so will likely involve outing magic, at least to a small group of people - and there's no way a secret told to even that group will stay secret for long - but is that really so bad? We've got a lot of people who'd be interested, we can figure out how to use it. Even without linker cores in most of the population, you could do something akin to Yoku Wakaru Gendai Mahou's modern magic and create meta-spells (spell compilers!) that don't require the user to have any ability to use.
(I have a significant hatred for "status quo is god".)
Well, I'm drawing conclusions from conclusions here, so I probably drifted off from your plot some paragraphs ago, but hopefully I got at least some of it right. And if you want to talk about it, feel free to drop me a line; we've discussed things like this quite a lot in the #nanoha IRC channel.
On a secondary note, re. last chapter...
Precia was insane. This is a well-known fact.
The method she used to create Fate, if it works the way she intended, *should* have resurrected Alicia. That's not exactly as well-known, but it's an inevitable conclusion based on some fairly reasonable assumptions. Fate behaves nothing like Alicia, but that means nothing; she's lived with /that woman/ for several years, as Fate. Once she gets over her issues, adult Fate honestly behaves more like what we've seen of Alicia than like nine-year-old Fate.
What I'm building up to is: There's a very good chance that Fate and Alicia is, in fact, the same person; that Precia did succeed, but didn't realize it. She was brain-damaged, and there's a thing called Capgras syndrome you should look up; check Wikipedia. The short of it is, Precia wouldn't necessarily have realized she succeeded, because she might be unable to recognize her. It makes Precia even more of a tragic figure, though - forced outside the reach of help because what she was doing was illegal (regardless of the fact that it worked), driven to hurt her own daughter by brain-damage caused by an experiment failure she spoke up against...
Whether or not that's true, it's something Shamal should consider. Her personal experience with resurrection should make it obvious to her that it's the mind that matters, not the body. If it isn't true, there'd be some question as to where exactly Fate's mind did come from, so even the "Not-quite-Alicia" option ends up being "Alicia, but with some mental damage from imperfect copying", and the fact that she's functional implies that by far the majority of her mind made it across.
I'm not sure she'd tell Fate. She doesn't seem like the kind of person who values truth for its own sake, and the consequences of telling her - when she wouldn't know for sure - I really don't know what they'd be. I'm leaning towards "it'd help", but it might make things worse. In cases like that, however, I default to telling the truth, and Shamal could ask Arf what she thinks.
Hope that gave you something to think about. :-)
| engkeat.goh chapter 15 . 1/12
Hurry update!Too long time to wait!
| Dramon Creator chapter 11 . 12/20/2013
Megane's back story makes me want to cry. The fact Quint and Zest die in canon makes me want to cry more. Nice work.
I've got a question though, is Reinforce awake in the Book, and if she is, does that mean every time the Book interacts with Hayate, it's Reinforce?
| Dramon Creator chapter 5 . 12/20/2013
Is this chapter 'Yuuno Saves The Day'? Because it seems like it,and it's awesome.
| Barrier Rights chapter 6 . 11/28/2013
She had hoped to stop cheating the building owner, but at this point a few more weeks would make no difference to him (he had never known she was living inside a 'barrier copy' of the building in the first place) the extra time could make a large difference to herself and Arf.
Fate is showing her Mid-Childan heritage here, for all that her only contact with Mid-Childan culture was secondhand through Alicia and Linith.
On more minor worlds within the TSAB, where only, say, ten percent of the population has magic, I suspect that it is completely routine for the right to make a barrier copy of a given piece of land to be decoupled from the right to use the ordinary substance of the land.
We see something like this even in the Real World, where the right to the airspace above a piece of land and the right to the minerals beneath it are frequently decoupled from the right to use the surface.
In fact, it might help when fitting everyone into the Takamachi home if Fate/Arf/Nanoha/Yuuno routinely popped into a barrier copy to live.
Especially if Yuuno wants to stop living as a conveniently-sized ferret for whatever reason.
Of course, that's assuming that whatever caused the other Takamachis to enter the barrier wouldn't necessarily happen when they're not desperate to stay with and protect Nanoha.
| kyle.l.adkins chapter 15 . 11/7/2013
really enjoy it so far cant wait for more
| Mooniecat chapter 15 . 11/1/2013
Having reread this i was struck by a few things. I really like the different approach to hayate's dilemma. And there is still the chance of linker core drainage but this time voluntary. Also this may finally set their worries aside so that hayate can have that closer relationship with everyone. I can see too that nanoha's family is important to things as a stable influence. I have to say this certainly has been one of the best written fics i have read.
| GeshronTyler chapter 14 . 9/13/2013
Oooh, this was a nice chapter. I admire the way you integrated Yuuno's Info-dump/exposition into the relevant scenes, and Arf and Yuuno's insights into Nanoha, her familiy, and the way they relate to each other was quite amusing. Quite thought-provoking as well, in regards to what Yuuno and Arf have learned about the Takamachis, and Nanoha in particular. Of course, the scene with Hayate and the Wolkenritter discovering that the Book is not by any means just content to let the days go by ratchets up the tension at the end.
| GeshronTyler chapter 15 . 9/13/2013
I'm glad to see that you're still plugging away at this story. I also approve of the "canon" conflict between Team Nanoha and Team Hayate being short-circuited. This does mean that the tension and plot drivers will need to be adjusted, but finding a way to save Hayate is certainly a worthy "quest". With Yuuno actively analysing the book, I imagine that Reinforce will end up playing a much larger role, as well as the "dreamscape" that Fate was briefly trapped in, in A's.
I still would like to get a greater view of what effects the dislocation had on earth, since I got the impression that the world at large did not escape unscathed/unmarked, and so few fics ever try to deal with non-mage factions on earth catching on to the events surrounding the BoD and the Seeds.
| SapphoSensei chapter 2 . 9/12/2013
Just started reading your story and I love how well you developed the science fiction aspect of the story.
| Arnoldstrife chapter 15 . 9/12/2013
WOW! this story is amazing. I randomly just found your story at Chapter 15 and I have t say this is an awesome story catching up!
Yuuno being able to help out with the Book of Darkness completely and utterly blindsided me. But it makes so much sense I can't believe it. I'm very eager to see what becomes of this. Although I'm not sure how helpful he can be. In the original he used the Infinite Library to do research but having the artifact hands on should be quite a boon to other areas of research.
Some other thoughts from reading the whole story thus far,
Yuuno went from random side kick in the canon to... Well really important side kick with lots of character development. I like it a lot, his frustrations and efforts really stand out. Of all the characters in your story he stands out as most improved in terms of development vs canon.
Fate I'm also really liking in that you're paying extra attentions to her problems that kind of got skipped over in the anime. It really does stand to reason that she'll need help. It would be very traumatizing. In that I'm glad you're shifting a bit of the focus so that fate isn't trying to level up with Nanoha right away, but sort through her own issues.
Which brings up Nanoha's family who now how a much broader role than before. They are put in a very unique position that they are more or less very out of the element but being the supporting family they are they have to step up to get up to speed and see where they can help when. Shirou is doing a stunning job so far, making contact with the Wolkenritter, using his perfectly logical skill set as an ex bodyguard to help out when they first met. One thing that surprised me a bit is that they didn't just adopt Fate and Arf straight out. After hearing their story, I would expect Momoko to just grab the lot of them and fly with it. At the hospital when Fate could of potentially rejected their offer, I would find that the parent's should of pushed even harder (even though Fate agreed anyhow) since as responsible adults such as themselves letting a now orphan 9 year old walk away would probable be against everything they believe in. Anyhow though I generally enjoy Nanoha's family portrayal and am interested in how you'll continue to develop them and their relationship with everyone else. Seeing Fate grow up in a different environment than the daughter of an military family like in Canon I'm wondering if she won't make some different choices for her future.
The TSAB side of things, I will admit I initially found the aftermath and the general TSAB side of thing boring when they would pop up earlier in the story. By the chapter dedicated to wrapping up the TSAB side of the story though I was well engross in their findings, even though I knew what happen the outsider point of view was really tragic and relating to the characters, what they were feeling while they got the most important clue I was slightly emotional. They realized that they didn't do anything when 2 promising kids had to save the world by themselves and failed. That the case as they knew it meant that even though the TSAB was supposed help in these kind of things the last message and the result from the only 2 people who could stop it but was unable to meant the worst of any kind of disaster happen. That has to be emotional. I felt it through the writing, all the part before that I found boring was brought personal and I understood then that you were writing not just to fill in the parts we're missing in the story but to tell us how tragic this event really was, Of the people who really did want to be there to do something about it, and How important it all was.
On to Hayate, She so far I think is the most lacking in plot time. Although to be fair she was introduced fairly recently. I would think that Nanoha finding another mage would of been more excited and spend more time with Hayate since they did seem to hit it off well after the misunderstanding cleared up. It might just be me however, but I find it strange that the Wolkenritter has more of a relationship with the Takamachis than Hayate has with Nanoha. You did however did a great job with her character I really feel for her in this chapter when she broken down crying it was very sad but showed the type of strong but delicate person she is. I think I'm a bit bias in her review since she does have tragic history and I just want good things to happen to her like Fate.
In all it's a fantastic story with extraordinary attention to character development. I can't wait till read more!
| Mooniecat chapter 15 . 9/6/2013
I certainly enjoy reading this. Tell you the truth, until this chapter I had not bothered to read your notes at the end as I find most authors tend to let out spoilers in long notes. I read this one and decided I should reread the whole thing again including the notes and I am impressed with the scope of the notes to work without spoiling anything of the future. I really look forward to seeing this and when I finally quit being lazy, I will log in and follow this story (logging in results in guilt for keeping plot bunnies in cages and not letting them out and a slight depression due to a keyboard that has fic writing critical keys non-working). Keep up the good work. Oh and a side note, I also know of a few year only updated fanfic and even one that seems to get updates once every two years.
| Mathais chapter 15 . 9/6/2013
It's fun. I'm consistently enjoying every chapter you've put out and the development on all sides. (Also, that CD thing is an interesting training method!) Thank you for the wonderful story so far!