Reviews for The Pureblood Pretense
fictionalfinesse chapter 14 . 9/17
hi! for your rewrite edits for posting to ao3:

"genteel" is what you mean. in the section with professor quirrel. not gentile
MonicaSage chapter 22 . 8/25
This is simply amazing and brought me great joy. Thank you for the hundreds of hours you must have spent on this.
Guest chapter 15 . 8/14
Ripped the letter into pieces to dispose of in different trash cans?

The castle is rife with FIREPLACES. Good goddess and god, I thought Harry was the smart one.
Trutharchivist chapter 22 . 8/11
All right. I'm quite a bit late, I know, but I've only recently learned of this fic via AO3, and wanted to write a review on the first fic as a whole.
Firstly, I'd like to admit to not reading Song of the Lioness, though I think I committed the unforgivable crime of reading about it in Wikipedia a while ago. I might try to read it after reading this fic, though.
A technical comment: while I enjoyed this fic a great deal, I think the final chapters were too long, and could be cut to smaller, more digestible pieces. Another note of somewhat technical nature is the formality sometimes found in some characters' interactions. Might be something from SotL, or just a portrayal of high society, but it comes of as a bit weird, to me.
In relation to Wizarding World continuity, the fic seems to be very consistent with the original, with changes mostly explained. The ripple effects from the change are dealt with effectively. I had my doubts at first, but most of the characters that needed explanation - Regulus Black, for example, or Peter Petigrew - were covered, so if I have further questions I just assume they'll be answered in later fics. I did think that the Pureblood laws will have far stronger ramifications, but this probably work better.
Harry/Rigel can be very frustrating a character at times. She tends to take her special abilities as completely normal, and is prone to do nothing proactive whatsoever. She had to have one of her friends under the threat of imminent death - and be attacked herself - to actually find a cure instead of keeping everyone alive for the time being. I just can't help but compare it to how the original Harry dealt with Hermione being petrified by the basilisk. He obviously had more to work with, but still. Harry has a severe case of deafness to the Call.
The magic system is fascinating. I know that my previous point was related to there not being much action, but I am interested in magical theory. The depiction of mind and magic as two different points in a wizard/witch made me think of Snape's discussion with Dumbledore about the connection between Harry and Voldemort in the Deathly Hallows: there is mind and there is soul, though in Harry and Voldemort's case "they are one and the same". An interesting situation, and your magic system might explain it. It reminded me a little if what the Methods of Rationality did with the magic system of Harry Potter, but it's not really the same.
A few small tidbits: as far as I see it, no explanation has actually been given to why is Harry so different from other wizards. I hope that there's an explanation in later fics, because otherwise it'll just stand out to me like a sore thumb. The Parselmouth situation seems a little problematic to me - it's not weird to me at all that it didn't come from Salazar himself, but it connected to the Peverells should have more ramifications, IMO, like there being Parselmouth Potters besides Harry, which would come of as weird since they're traditionally Gryffindor. It's also probably teachable, as I think Dumbledore knew Parseltongue in the original series.
I'm interested to see where this series will go. It appears to have a more political focus than the original Harry Potter, which may be an element from SotL and may be a result of having the protagonist be a Slytherin.
Thank you for reading my review, and have a good day,
Trutharchivist.
London Knight chapter 2 . 7/27
And now Rigel is a vegetarian ?! WTAF ! *Major Mary Sue Alert Level 11' !
If your a vegetarian then do not foist your beliefs on your main characters please . It's amateurish in the extreme & goes way against canon .
Plus at the time 99% of state schools in UK did not cater for veggies - they had to go home for lunch or bring packed lunches .
At boarding schools it was even worse - you ate what you were given or starved . Veggie friend of mine at my school was force fed sausages by bullies & there was no comebacks . Both he & other two veggies in my time there were mercilessly ridiculed for their beliefs . This was a few years before 1991 but things did not change until late 90s .

This fic has gone too over the top into your personal head canon to be readable by me . Stopping here . Bye .
LK Again chapter 2 . 7/26
Britpicking : 'garden salad' in UK is having your face shoved into grass or other foliage & thus not an actual foodstuff ... Try green salad or just salad - even though there's many different kinds . Only salads that have extras in them - potato , pasta , cheese etc - are called anything different majority of the time .
LK Again chapter 2 . 7/26
Most readers would fail to see the attraction that those two Slytherin girls show towards Malfoy . Canon!Draco has an egg shaped head with a pointy chin , not how he looks in the films .
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He has an inbred look of some European royalty but taken to more extreme degree - a bit like the Hapsburgs . Pureblood magical inheritance can only go so far to combat these genetic problems , with these unappealing facial features .

So no swooning & please avoid 'sexy Draco' fanon myths .
London Knight chapter 2 . 7/26
Think you meant mass telekintic or 'banishing' spell , rather than 'mass hypnotic spell' used on the little boats ? Hypnotic by definition means involving a mind ... doubt even these magical boats would have one ...
LK Again chapter 1 . 7/26
Britpicking : 'upper-classman' is completely alien term in UK ; use senior years , upper years or even 'older pupils' . If your going to write about about British people , at a British school , then at least TRY to use British terms ... If your not sure then ask for help ...
LK Again chapter 1 . 7/26
Never 'restroom' in UK & bathrooms have to have baths - some bathrooms do not even have toilets in them . British vernacular is a toilet , 'the bog , the lavatory or in very old terms (pre 1960s) the water closet (the WC) .
It amazes Brits that most people from North America will go to extreme lengths to avoid saying toilet ... and those I mention are just the polite words for them ...
LK Again chapter 1 . 7/26
Britpicking : 'rookie professors' ... No ... just no ... NEW Teachers/Professors or inexperienced ones , rookie isn't really a British term & especially not in that timeframe .

I know your trying to avoid cliché but your already falling for many debunked fanon tropes ... Okay I know this was first posted ten years ago , but even simple Google searches can verify canon facts . AUs should at least try to be based in some Wizarding World basis . It grates big time when things like Lordships get bandied about completely unnecessarily & Snape being a 'Potions Master' as opposed to 'master/professor of potions AT Hogwarts' . It take it in this AU he's better at potions than Slughorn then ? We'll see ...
LK Again chapter 1 . 7/26
Britpicking : 'Christmas Holiday' not winter break ... Unlike USA we actually get proper holidays in UK ...
AvidFan chapter 1 . 7/25
This is my third read through. This story has lost none of it's charm on re-reading. The entire series is a delight. I will be sharing this series will all of my friends, fans of the genre and excellent literature alike. I do hope you keep writing, not just this series but beyond. You have the makings of a great author and should you feel inclined, i'm sure people would love to share in your art.
London Knight chapter 1 . 7/25
Merlin's ballbag ! British people people do not call there cousins 'cuz' ... expect in an extremely sarcastic way when putting on a obviously fake American accent ...

Came here hoping for a long read , but ... ... flaws ... within first few does not bowd well for this or it's sequels ...

YouTube a video : how British people talk to their family members ...
cloverskye chapter 9 . 7/9
I'd suggest an easy fix for pj's. She takes a shower every night before bed, instead of in the morning. Then she can just take a change of clothes with her for her morning bathroom/teeth brush routine.
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