Reviews for The Pureblood Pretense
Cyclical Beats84 chapter 4 . 1/10/2023
I'll be honest, I find Rigel's complete disinterest in magic and excelling at classes abhorrent. I hope someone sets him straight and soon. Seems like the only one capable at this point is Snape.
DeDuck chapter 15 . 1/4/2023
I don't particularly love crossovers, and I don't know that I've ever reviewed anything on ffn, but the fact that this is a TAMORA PIERCE crossover is changing both of those facts.

So anyways, Alanna belongs with George (I spend like three and a half books trying to tell her that whenever I reread the Lioness quartet but for some reason she doesn't listen until the end) and there's a George in HP and as of this chapter I'm shipping them. I REALLY hope the bit about her being in George's arms when they snagged her in the staircase is foreshadowing that.

And SO HELP ME, if you kill Thom. Especially after this chapter with his POV. That's the only mistake that Tamora Pierce ever made. (Daine's age is a bit squicky but Thom's death is the one part of the Tortal serieses that I cannot accept)
Guest chapter 21 . 12/25/2022
I wonder if Snape eventually regrets lying to Rigel and the Malfoys, because if he'd told the truth, the Malfoys might not have given the life debt, which then means Rigel couldn't have called it when he was discovered... which means one more person could've looked for him later on...

lots to think about
Guest chapter 11 . 12/23/2022
I just realized you foreshadowed Harry's core memory that was stopping her from reaching her potential this chapter! awwww this is so good I can't believe I missed all these little details my first few rereads!
Guest chapter 8 . 12/23/2022
omg I just had the thought that *spoiler* now that Snape knows the truth, he's probably going to look back at all their encounters via pensive probably and see all the little hints and slip ups, just like Rigels little freak out... it makes me sad imagining him stooped over the pensive, wondering how he could've missed all the signs,,, so sad :'(
Guest chapter 5 . 12/23/2022
"Are you an angel, then, Malfoy?"

so cute!

I ship it 3
Guest chapter 4 . 12/23/2022
I'm rereading this again, (I can't remember how many times I've reread this series) and the owlery scene really hit me, and now I really want to draw that scene it's so cute! lol that's all
aki93 chapter 20 . 12/18/2022
This is my third read for this story. Done in 3 day. It is always a pleasure. And despite the long wait between chapters, I'm obviously referring to the last installment of the series, it is well worth it. Thank you for your hard work! I hope you will always find inspiration to keep going
LadyGrimR chapter 22 . 12/12/2022
THIS is so very epic. I'm super glad I found this fic.
DeadFish37 chapter 8 . 11/9/2022
This is really fun so far. You've created a great character. I find myself wondering what she'll do when she hits puberty though. It's hard to believe she could keep her secrets even as long as this.
Burke Manring chapter 17 . 11/2/2022
Hi, quick clarification: I don’t know if this is what you intended, but you made it sound like lawyers get to write whatever laws they want into being, and the Wizengamot just enforces them. That’s . . . not how that works at all, but I think you know that based on your previous mentions of bills the S.O.W. party are trying to pass through the Wizengamot, establishing it as the British Wizarding Government’s legislative body—which it is. Lawyers (at least in the American governmental system, which is based on English common law) are part of the judicial system, which has absolutely no hand in creating new legislations or enforcing them, but only in interpreting them and prescribing punishment for their being broken.

Sorry for the long tirade on stuff you almost definitely already know; I just wanted to get this down to make myself feel better, and if someone else reading this is now better educated about the American legal system, then great!
Flo150203 chapter 19 . 10/8/2022
Ì‘m surprised Rigel agrees to a vow of undisclosed debt. Flint could demand anything. Her situation is even worse than before. Before, he could only tell on her. Now, the vow could make her do things she does not want to do and land her in Azkaban anyway - or destroy her family and friends. And she even asked for this.
Flo150203 chapter 18 . 10/8/2022
Oh, my, Rigel is the prodigy of prodigies. By the end of the year she is probably going to replace Snape in his lab and he will ask her to brew potions since his own magical core has been depleted while Rigel‘s magic is an everlasting pool.;)

And Archie is one, too. Reading medical journals at the age of 8… I hope you don‘t make him solve the issue of the illness.

Usually I would stop right here (actually I would have stopped several chapters ago), since I can‘t bear overpowered characters and this is definitely on the verge of Mary Sue territory. But it is so well written and captivating, I just can‘t help but read on… :)

Thanks for writing & sharing! Although I might not agree with your choices, I very much appreciate your story. You gave me several entertaining hours. Thanks for that!
Flo150203 chapter 17 . 10/7/2022
I really like your story but there are some things that are bothering me more and more. The amount of work that Rigel magically manages to accomplish is one of those things. It‘s getting utterly ridiculous. First, she, an 11 year old 1st year, does the homework of Flint who‘s a several years older 5th year. This in itself is highly improbable. It would even be difficult if she were to attend his classes. There is an intellectual difference between an 11 year old and a 15 year old. Accordingly the homework of a 15 year old is much more demanding. She is also missing all the knowledge of the school years in between. Imagine a 5th grade trying to do the math homework of a 9th grade. It’s insane. Even Percy‘s help could not make up for this missing knowledge.

Rigel should have difficulties to get Flint’s homework done at all - and now her work is even too good?

In addition she studies healing, supposedly the same curriculum as Harry so she could pass as him (or herself ;)) during breaks. All that on her own without help and any instructions.

Then she has the extra potions work for Snape. So far it was just extra work. Now it is extra work on apprentice level and beyond NEWT level. And if that‘s not enough she starts brewing in her private lab. Brewing potions takes time - probably a lot of time.

What is she? Some kind of super prodigy that has talents and power far beyond any one else and has also mastered controlling time? It is getting so unrealistic that it really spoils the story. Which is rather sad because you‘ve got such an intriguing concept and write very well.

Apart from these things that irk me I have enjoyed myself very much (thanks for that!). For the most part I just have to constantly remind myself that Rigel & co are supposed to be 11 year old children. ;)

Anyway, thank you very much for writing and sharing this! I really do appreciate it.
fictionalfinesse chapter 14 . 9/17/2022
hi! for your rewrite edits for posting to ao3:

"genteel" is what you mean. in the section with professor quirrel. not gentile
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