|Reviews for Time crisis|
| AreoKazamaBlur chapter 1 . 9/15/2012
I can tell that you really hate oreal. But a great story nonetheless! But you spelled all the characters names wrong and chapter has no dialogue between the agents. But one thing. Oreal is sick in the head. I look forward to another story as great as this, bob!
| Elemental-Zer0 chapter 1 . 1/20/2012
An interesting plot! I LOVE the idea of terrorists taking over a school as that's not something I've come across in Time Crisis yet.
I do have some advice though; maybe you should add a bit to describe the surroundings, feelings, emotions and actual actions of the story rather than rushing it with a vague monologue of what's going on? It's good what you've done, but I feel you could make it better if you took a little more time with it and concentrated on the details I mentioned above.
Good work though, I look forward to an improved read.