Reviews for Emma's Endeavor
madeline313 chapter 3 . 6/17/2012
Wow! I'm pretty much new to this website and the reason I joined was because I wanted to write a VP fanfic. I was browsing through the already existing fics for VP and yours is by far one of the better ones! Emma is a really likeable character and your sense of imagery is just phenominal. I also really like how much of the game you incorporate into your story. It's too bad you don't update more often, I'm in love with this story and your writing. Good job and keep it up! :)
Epic Laughter chapter 3 . 5/25/2012
Hooray, another chapter! :D I was hoping you would update again

I really, REALLY like how you incorporate game mechanics into your narrative. I've never seen anyone try to put the whole romancing maze into their stories and you pulled it off quite well! :D

You write Leafos very well, too And you mentioned Sahari! I'm quite fond of her; I'm looking forward to seeing how you write her and whatever other characters might show up.

I'm also looking forward to learning more about Emma, she's very endearing but we don't know too terribly much about her personality and interests yet. I did love her fondness over her dog, though, enough to put her on her gardening label. :D

Love it, as always!
Tiigerliily chapter 3 . 5/25/2012
This story is such an amazing contribution to the VP section! :D I especially liked the beginning ''No, not the train... Don't go...'' XD The way you describe every single sound every single piƱata makes really takes me back to the very first time I ever played the game, which might be something like five years ago now... It's awesome! :'D

I like how you write for Leafos. What she said about her father was VE-RY in character! :D I'm still curious to see how you'll write for the other characters... I've got the feeling that you'd do great at writing Seedos! :D

Overall; this chapter was a good read and I hope that you'll update soon! :D I understand if you don't have the time though! :P
Tiigerliily chapter 2 . 3/17/2012
Hey, you finally updated! :D

Great chapter! I really like how you write for Seedos - I think you've figured him out amazingly well! :D

I enjoyed the chapter A LOT and I hope you'll continue writing this story! :D I'm curious how you see the VP Universe and how you write for the other Islanders, your vision seems interesting! If you have other things to write on, I totally understand though! And as for that Author's Note; the story doesn't seem like it's dragging along AT ALL! :D
Suki Takayoshi chapter 2 . 3/4/2012
Ugh I don't like arocknids either xD Your not alone Emma!

Which by the way, i really love her :D She's so adorable, and she seems to really get what she's doing really well! Aw, Whirlms are also very cute :3 not the cutest pinata, but pretty cute!

And man, there you go again :D I don't know how you managed to describe Seedos so well... but you did xD I wish I knew how to write descriptions!

But yup :D I'm so glad I finally decided to read this! I think I just put it in my community and never really read it... wow... I should have xD

Anywho... Update soon :D Don't keep me waiting too long!
Suki Takayoshi chapter 1 . 3/4/2012
:D Wow... I love this already :D

I am so jealous! I can't write first person well at ALL D: And Emma... She seems wonderful :D

And your descriptions... so simple, yet they really give you a picture of what the characters look like :D

And Hunter... He's kinda adorable :D

Wow... such a wonderful start too!
Epic Laughter chapter 2 . 3/3/2012
In response to your response, yup! VP fics are rare, rare, rare! I adore them, though, this is absolutely my favorite universe to write for...as you can probably tell by the fact that my account's writings are naught but VP! XD

If you do want to read some of mine, I'd be happy! If you're too busy though, that's fine, too. :) I recommend the work of Tiigerliily and Suki Takayoshi, as well. The former utilizes some surprising suspense and the latter's stories are just adorable!

We all use characters from the sequel, Trouble in Paradise, as well, though. If you don't have the game and you want to read the stories anyway, I can fill you in about those characters and show you pictures. They only have nine lines each, anyway, since they only judge a pinata show minigame called the P-Factor! XD They're all great, though, the fanon personalities for them are FUN!

And, uh, if you do read want to read my stories eventually, start with Bride of Pester or Man's Army. My older fics are EMBARRASSINGLY bad. _;

Anyway, onto what I thought of the story!

I loveloveLOVE how you're writing this in first person. First time I ever saw someone do a VP fic in that format, and it's really refreshing and different! Emma's adorable; I love her enthusiasm and how comfortable she is on Pinata Island already! It's great that she gets along with Seedos, as well, he's my favorite character! :D

I love how you describe the actions of the pinatas. That's something that I myself never had a gift for, since most of them can't talk. Those Whirlms sound positively adorable!

I also love your character descriptions. They're positively perfect! Your description in general, too. I'm not gonna lie; I'm actually jealous of your ability in that department!

This was short, but it was fantastic and worth the wait. Take all the time you need for another chapter, I'll certainly be looking forward to more and leave you the best reviews I can muster! Keep up the fantastic work, and good luck with all of your stories! :D
Jill chapter 1 . 2/2/2012
This is just...wow! It's amazing! I'm sad you haven't updated it, though, more would be totally awesome :(
Anonymous chapter 1 . 12/20/2011
This is really good so far! One of the best VP fics I've read in a while... :3 Your OC seems really cool too, I can't wait to learn more about her! Sad you don't plan on adding to it too often, but oh well, it can't be helped. I will be looking forward to when you DO update, though!
Tiigerliily chapter 1 . 12/9/2011
This story's well written, and I love the way you describe that Whirlm, haha! I must admit I also found them kinda cute when I first played the game... And I also remember getting upset when one of them got ill. :

I know you probably won't update in a while if ever, but I'd say, give this story a shot and keep up the good work! :D
Epic Laughter chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
Oh my gosh, I grinned like a fool when I saw this in the fanfiction archive! Fan fiction about the game and the Villagers is such a rarity, it always makes me happy to find some!

Yours is really, REALLY good too! I'm really liking it so far. Emma seems really interesting, and it's nice to see Pinata Island from someone else's perspective. It really is a fun place to write for. :D I'll be looking forward to seeing how you write for the other Villagers!

Good luck with all of your other stories, and this one too! I'll be looking forward to the next chapter for sure!