|Reviews for My Gift|
| BigHair chapter 1 . 5/16/2012
Wow I really love this one :D very dark and interesting. I love how throughout the story you took Luna's rational thinking and had it slowly descend into just utter madness. And I loved the small parts every once in a while where it was bold print. Made me imagine her voice suddenly going deep and raspy like a crazy person's voice would sound _ and the best part, I can't think of a better way of how that would've went in the actual show. I'd say you've definitely hit the nail on the head with this one :) great job!
| Questionable Object chapter 1 . 1/17/2012
| jman377355 chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
Very good, thought the possession was handled nicely, I wouldn't mind this going a bit farther until she got imprisoned.
| DEMYX9193 chapter 1 . 12/12/2011
Ooh, nice and dark. I must say that you write from an insane perspective quite well. (Which raises a few questions.) It reminded me a lot of Poe's The Tell-Tale Heart due to the lack of real dialogue and breakdown of the main character through inner monologues. You took Luna's rational thoughts and ran then through the mud until they were barely coherent madness. If FiM ever became a mature show, I'd want you writing a Nightmare Moon episode.
| snake screamer chapter 1 . 12/10/2011
Its dark, very very dark. btw heres a theory on the new ep
i read someones theory (Cannot remember who it was) is that dragon growth is simultaneously inversely proportional to age and directly proportional to the size of their treasure. Most dragons wouldn't have a big treasure until they're big and old enough to defend it successfully, meaning their growth is normally fairly constant.
| FanNotANerd chapter 1 . 12/9/2011
Wow. Just...wow. I can't even...wow.
This is unexpected. Usually, my reviews couple praise with constructive criticism. But I...I've got nothing. Nothing to improve. And any praise would feel empty.
Brilliant, and nothing less.
| Heart of Blades chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
NICE! I mean, nice is a terrible turm, more like fantastic! That's what this is, character study at it's best, an indepth lok of decention into bitter hatered and jelouse. I love it!
AT first, the zero diolog through me off because I wasn't excpecting it, but in the end it makes perfect sicne, because all of this is taking place in Luna's...or should I say Nightmare Moon's head. Her thoughts and feels on the events and people around her. It was a delight to read and I'm thrilled to have it in my fav list :D
| cydonic chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
Well... damn. I think I'll make this the exception to my no first person rule. This was engaging to the point where I was sad to see it end.
For a lot of the fic, I couldn't tell whether it was Luna or Nightmare Moon in control. At times it felt like it was one or the other, as if you were reading the war waged between both - there were fractions of Luna in there, scattered amongst Nightmare Moon.
I really liked how you didn't include speech. It is in there, but having Nightmare Moon thinking about what was said really makes you detached from what they're talking about. It feels like Celestia's words are just background noise for the thoughts in Nightmare Moon's mind.
"Like tiny threads of a spider's web, the silky hair passes over my skin."
This line actually made me shudder, and I can actually feel a phantom spider web on my skin. It's creepy imagery, but it's fantastic.
"Thousands of tiny prismatic knives pierce into my fur."
This line too, which just left me in awe for a second. It just felt so... amazing.
| Callum Mulallum chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
Ugh, how did I not see this one earlier? Thank god Amber pointed it out..
YOU F**KING ROCK
Not entirely sure how you pulled this off, but you did. The insanity, the emotion behind those words...
The intro is really chilling. I mean seriously. Best intro to a story I have ever read. This is beginning to rival your other works... I'm certainly looking forwards to crossroads and beyond now
Can't believe you're getting bitched at for bold font and line breaks. The trolls can't pick any real faults with your work anymore! That's good, no? :D
Love it as always,
| Zervziel chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
Cool! New story! I'll just give this a quick look- AAAAAAUGH FIRST PERSON PERSPECTIVE! My one weakness! How'd you know? *dies* Dunno why but fpp hates me...and I hate it. Also pancake fortress.
| Rowanoak23 chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
Oh wow...very dark and gripping. The perfect portrayal of paranoia and rage of one who feels every slight-real or perceived-like a dagger in your nerves.
Should I ever want to get inside the mind of the insanely jealous, I know who I should call.
| DreadedCandiru2 chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
So...this is what she was thinking back when she got assimilated by the Nightmare Entity. The poor dear honestly seems to have thought that she had free will. Damn.
| Amber Treelights chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
I'm unsure if I can even word a review properly. You definitely pulled this off perfectly, and it's very clear through the whole thing that poor Luna is falling deeper and deeper into madness; the fact that she considers herself still sane definitely adds a wonderfully horrific tone as well. Crazy people never believe they're crazy, after all. I'd think the same holds true for crazy ponies as well. I love the way Luna is completely shutting out every perspective except her own (or rather, Nightmare Moon's own), and pretty much in complete delusion.
Usually I'm a little funny when it comes to first person writings, but you did an excellent job here. I honestly don't think you could've captured Luna's emotions as well as you did without writing it directly from her point of view. I also don't think you could've emphasized Luna as not completely herself anymore without it either. Her hatred of Celestia in this is very sad, but beautifully portrayed. You definitely made the right call in using this perspective.
The repetition was a great tactic: I've always been a fan of repetition to begin with (it's one of my favorite literary devices) So yeah, I loved it. It was beautifully done, as were the choppy sentences. Perfect for the mind of a crazy pony, and first person thoughts in general.
The writing style itself is some of the best writing I've seen from you, to be honest. Actually, it might be THE best. I'm really impressed, beyond more than I can even say, and I swear to Celestia, if EqD gives you bad reviews on this one, I'm going to be pissed. They don't know what real writing is if they dislike this one.
I hope to see more stuff similar to this in the future (: 'Twas fantastic!