|Reviews for A Single Touch|
| StrawberryDuckFeathers chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
Aww, that's a very sweet thank-you note for your beta. :)
I love that first line- 'A single touch'. It's such a short sentence, but with so much impact. :)
I think that you've written Okabe to be very in-character here. I love the way that he describes himself dying with her, in a sense, and the fact that her mentions the loop makes it seem like the pain in his heart just won't go away. :( It's sweet how much he'll sacrifice for her, and you've covered his feelings about her perfectly. :D
Here are my critique and suggestions to give you a helping hand. :)
. (And all that's left is the single and simple push of a button,
And with it I will sacrifice the one I love for her sake,)
These two sentences should end with full stops.
This is wonderful. Great job! Keep up the good work. :D
| Terikel chapter 1 . 10/20/2012
Very intense, and so very true and heartbreaking. Okabe really sacrificed everything for Mayuri.
Beautifully written. :)
| ICWinter chapter 1 . 12/18/2011
I must say something important, while the story was good, and I liked how Okabe was musing about what he's going to do once he presses delete, I wanted to point out that Okabe always called Mayushii by her real name: Mayuri. Kind of a little mistake, but overall, the story is fine.