Reviews for Momo the Battle Mage
Ohfortheloveofpete chapter 1 . 12/24/2012
It'd be funny if they visited Empryean since it's a land of technology rather than magic...
Darkis Shadow chapter 1 . 12/16/2012
Did you change Lim Lim to an Elementalist to fit the story? Lim Lim is a battle mage in the game that knows Fire Pillar. I'm sure you know this already though. Nice story though
Nutrire chapter 1 . 9/22/2012
Cute and adorable, wished it was longer. -Sad Face-lo
Dzuljeta chapter 1 . 4/26/2012
The huge paragraphs did seem frightening at first.

But I enjoy your story so far.
Cheyla chapter 1 . 4/19/2012
You have a great start so far. The only thing that I can recommend doing is perhaps start a new paragraph every time someone different starts to talk. It may just be a personal preference but I think it makes things easier to read and prevents paragraphs from becoming too long.
Perfect Beauty chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
I must admit I know little to no information about your fandom, sorry. But, I think this story flows very smoothly. Good job.
ChibiSoulReader chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
Although I have little knowledge of this fandom, The story is well written and it flowed smoothly. In other words, I liked this story and they ending was cute

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Akela Victoire chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
Hey there David! I'm here with the promised review from our little group! :D

I did enjoy this piece. I am not familiar with this fandom at all but it was a good read. I love a good fight scene and yours here wasn't bad at all!

I hope you continue for the sake of the readers in this fandom!
Koolkatx chapter 1 . 2/15/2012
I think giving Lim Lim a sis is really cute(maybe now the next time I go there she won't blast my character into oblivion! :D) Anywho, this was well written, good job. :3