|Reviews for Unexpected Consequence|
| Guest chapter 26 . 12/3/2013
I don't think she was being a bitch...I thought the lady was just being concerned ...(but u know I already like the story im the weird guest who cheered over the fruk in the manga XD)
| Guest chapter 19 . 12/3/2013
t was of two handsome anime men. One was of a guywho looked a lot like Francis, andthe other was a man with very bushy eyebrows and green eyes.
LOL I SEE WHAT U DID THERE! FRUK FTW!
Lol yeah nice story ! Its more of a light thing but very nice after a hard day. Im glad u make her less of a hardass as the story progresses- I don't think shed b that mean to those she really loves, so that's good. :) however Francis seems very...perfect. lol, I mean, I KNOW he is XD but either way I like this nice bit if fruk fluff since its pretty cute and its my headcannon that Alice dated alfie but then stopped and eventually realized she loved Francis ...course it's also my head cannon that she and Alfred never...yeah...but hey u made it work XD
I also want an update :p I understand if your busy , and I wish u luck :) but if you have spare time and read this weird review ...please concider updates. I want an epilogue with marriage and *babbles on and on*
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/3/2013
Lol was laughing all through chapter 5
| TrickToTricks chapter 38 . 11/18/2013
I loved this story though I am a bit disappointed that her elder brothers weren't in it (( Scotland, Wales, and Ireland.))
| Master Derpy-fem-Jay chapter 8 . 9/12/2013
Is the pub and go refernce "Hot. Hot. Hot!" ?
| sarita chapter 38 . 8/9/2013
| WhoIsThis08 chapter 38 . 7/31/2013
I really like this story, I think it has many good elements that can draw you in easily. I'm really enjoying this and can't wait for the next chapter! (:
| Guest chapter 38 . 7/30/2013
You've dragged is out for far too long. Your plot isn't much of a plot. The characters are shallow. You've simply taken their generic, prominent, and, frankly, over-done traits and emphasized them so that there's no room for depth. Your dialogue is...it sounds like something I might hear on a child's sitcom. Not only is it OOC, but some of the things that happen are just unrealistic. Alfred not telling his parents he knocked up a girl? And Alice not having a more severe, pissed-off, exasperated reaction? You've taken a situation and molded it to what you want to happen, distorted it, having no regard for personalities or depth.
Notes for improvement: Think things through multiple times before typing it. Consider multiple reactions, multiple outcomes. In trying to understand a character better, assign them more quirks. You have to really get inside a character's head. DEPTH. YOU NEED CHARACTER DEPTH. To make situations realistic, imagine your friends and family dealing with the issue so you have at least some idea of what might happen.
| SasukeLover01 chapter 38 . 7/26/2013
OMG THIS FANFICTION AS BEEN THE BEST! I kept up with it ion that other website till 33 then moved here for the rest. I have laughed a lot and had a great time reading this and I can't wait to see how this fanfiction ends. Catch ya later - ( * ) ( * ) Tomatoes
| chibi-unicorn-girl chapter 38 . 7/25/2013
| Guest chapter 38 . 7/25/2013
This chapter was awesome and it made me happy to know this wasn't discontinued. :)
| TheSlayerGirl chapter 38 . 7/25/2013
I WANT LOVI TO FINISH HER SENTANCE! TT-TT
| Yami Mizuna chapter 38 . 7/25/2013
Still no eyebrows?
| elizabeth duchanne chapter 37 . 7/12/2013
| Redbluyellowrose chapter 37 . 6/17/2013
I reallyreallyreally like this story! It's adorable and heartwarming. J the only thing i don't like is that i miss ivan... I guess i'm just too picky. Lol. Feel free to disregard everything i said.