|Reviews for Night of the Waltz|
| AKAAkira chapter 1 . 1/9/2012
Nice little story. It was short, but it conveyed its mood well enough.
I guess an idea I would suggest to improve this is to crank up the contrast while dimming the picture. For example, during the middle bit's flashback, using adjectives/nouns like colourful, rambles, hyper, sweet - words that demonstrate happiness, words that are positive. At the beginning (you built the end well enough) you could describe the floor as unforgiving, the dance as lonely, the room as bleak, the air as heavy - you could even sneak a bit of foreshadowing even in the middle, like that little tidbit about gossip can be about who broke up with who.
Did that help?
| DW Dezmond chapter 1 . 1/4/2012
Aww! Cute! Well writen for being so short!