Reviews for Midnight at the Precinct
Rainbowsharpies chapter 8 . 12/19/2012
Well, that was anticlimactic!

Great story though, but I wish it had gone further. D: I've got a major desire to read a good Berk/Ryo lemon.
Rainbowsharpies chapter 7 . 12/19/2012
I almost forgot about poor Dee. That was quite a strong reaction from him, although I can't say I found it in the least out of character. That was some serious betrayal. Dee has invested a lot of time and energy into his courtship of Ryo, not to mention staying abstinent for so long out of respect for him, and there goes Ryo, whoring around town while Dee so patiently waits...Not that I'm not enjoying it!
Rainbowsharpies chapter 6 . 12/19/2012
Ryo, you dirty, dirty boy. Surely you must've known what would happen?

Bikky's reaction seemed pretty reasonable.

Hot kiss, btw!
Rainbowsharpies chapter 5 . 12/19/2012
I like to think that Ryo would be very impressed by Berkeley's rather ostentatious taste, but would also be a bit overwhelmed and feel a bit awkward. Clearly, Ryo has class, but he also believes in moderation and is not such a show off. I'm sure part of him secretly enjoys being wined and dined and driven around in a fancy car that he could never afford and would probably never justify buying for himself even if he could.

Also, I'm digging the interaction between Bikky and Berkeley. Will he react more strongly than with Dee?
Rainbowsharpies chapter 4 . 12/19/2012
I'm really glad you've shown the relatable side of Berkeley that we all know is there...He is not all bad! You've also shown some of Dee's less than desirable traits without necessarily justifying them or romanticizing them like most. It is easy to imagine this happening under these circumstances: Dee is acting more childishly than usual, and suddenly Berkeley is looking very mature and refined.

Some might argue that you've written Ryo a bit too compliant here, but I honestly don't think it is too far from the truth. He's always been a bit wishy washy and unsure of himself...In the right situation, I believe he could be very open (if hesitant) to the commisioner's advances.
Rainbowsharpies chapter 3 . 12/19/2012
Now for a few of the issues I had with this story. Let me start by saying that they were easily forgiven and eclipsed by the many positive aspects of your lovely story, but there were a few iffy bits. I found that the description of the whole suicide/homicide debate seemed unlikely and oversimplified. The details were pretty unnecessary to the story and almost weakened it in my opinion. I sympathise with you because one of the main reasons I avoid writing for this fandom is the very limited knowledge I have of police work (outside of being constantly pestered by them XD), and really only knowing what I've learned from Law & Order. Certainly some details relating to cases can add to FAKE stories (notably anything ever written by Brit_columbia!) but here, I am not so sure.

Also, when a man is "blonde" it should be spelled "blond", and likewise, "brunette" should actually be "brunet".
Rainbowsharpies chapter 2 . 12/19/2012
I love a cadillac as well! For some reason I always imagined the commisioner would drive something foreign though. Perhaps a mercedes or a bmw.

Anyway, interesting to see how open Ryo might be to Berkeley when he is mad at Dee! It's kind of scary that it doesn't take too much, and I can see this happening, honestly. Ryo is obviously attracted to him even if he makes him uncomfortable and doesn't give him the same fuzzy feelings Dee does. Ryo and Berkeley have way more in common than Dee and Ryo, so I can't imagine it would never cross his mind. Don't get me wrong, I'm still a hard core DeeXRyo supporter, but I wish more people would explore this pairing. I think it is a hot and fascinating combination.
Rainbowsharpies chapter 1 . 12/19/2012
I really thought this story deserved more reviews, so I will make like Jolly and review them all!

I must say, I was pretty excited to find a story featuring these two, and a pretty good one at that!
Purple Lulu chapter 8 . 9/25/2012
I absolutely loved this. It's adorable. But one thing kinda confused me, I'm pretty sure Ryo has brown hair not blond. I did notice he seemed blond in the sequal but in the OVA he was a brunette and it was stated so in the manga once.
ladysakura31 chapter 8 . 8/2/2012
Oh please tell me ur updating this? The story's getting really good :) i feel bad for Ryo though, he's suffering so much. hopefully he'll pick Dee soon so he can move on with his life,
Jollyolly chapter 8 . 1/14/2012
I'm sorry I didn't review the last chapter of this story! Especially, when I went to great pains to review the others.

I must say I did like how it ended. I was curious as to whether or not Ryo would explore something with Rose but he did have those strong feelings for Dee to contend with.

Thanks for your hard work and I look forward to anything else you may come up with in the future! :)
FortunateM chapter 8 . 12/30/2011
***Thank you for your kind acknowledgement***

It was an easy assessment of their attitudes as your character depictions are smooth and well defined, clearly distinguishing each one. Their individual responses and actions, idiosyncrasies and nuances, give integrity and substance to their personality, which you have certainly captured in your description of their reactions arising from the situations in each chapter. All nicley smothered in a healthy dose of humour and angst.

Fine work and thank you for your continued updates!

FM

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Jollyolly chapter 7 . 12/30/2011
Wow! These updates are coming fast and furious! Just the way I like 'em!

Okay, Dee's response, while no surprise, was still quite explosive. I knew he'd lose his temper but to what extent was answered nicely in this chapter.

Ryo, in my opinion, is a bit unsure and timid. I'd like to see him more firm in his feelings or in himself at least. I'd like to see him grow in future fics. Anyway, just my viewpoint.

Thanks for updating and now, off to the conclusion! :)
Jollyolly chapter 6 . 12/26/2011
Yay! Another dedication! :)

Oh man, that was quite a chapter. I'm loving how Rose's emotions seemed to get the better of him. That his usual stoic manner was seriously tested by Ryo's cuteness. Very nice descriptions of how Rose was barely holding back his lust, how badly he wanted to ravish that doe-eyed Ryo...it gave me shivers! Now, THAT'S the hallmark of great writing...when your readers get goosebumps!

Again, I'm hoping another level will be reached between these men...one where Bikky is out of the picture (can he be sent to camp or something?) and Dee's image isn't swarming in the back of Ryo's brain. It would be most appreciated by this humble reader!

Thanks again, and I hope your trip doesn't impede your efforts on updates 'cause it'll make me sad. :)
kitty1988 chapter 6 . 12/26/2011
Love it!
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