|Reviews for Sectumsempra|
| NotJustAMuggle chapter 6 . 1/4/2012
The story is moving forward wonderfully. I don't think that Lily is getting over what happened too soon. People often have small gaps in their grieving period where they seem to be happy. This is Lily's "gap". And I love what is happening to Severus. He is experiencing happiness for the first time. Just an idea here. You know how Dumbledore gave Harry his father's invisibility cloak his first year at Hogwarts because Dumbledore had it at the time of Jame's death? Maybe he should give it to Lily in rememberence of her husband. She could have all sorts of fun with that cloak.
| animefreakazoid01 chapter 6 . 1/3/2012
what a wonderful chapter. i love your story and the characters in it especially snape!
| NotJustAMuggle chapter 5 . 12/29/2011
I haven't reviewed the last couple of chapters so here we go. Ah, you took Neville away. I guess Grandma deserved to have him, but it would have been nice if Lily could have had him. I knew that you were going to have the Mirror of Erised in there. It was inevitable. You are a very good writer. I feel like I am in the head of your characters sometimes. I am so excited to read some more of your work. Keep up the amazing work! P.S. I am sorry about my story Living to Die. I have had brain farts and can't think of how to start it. I know you want to read it, so I will work hard on it. Promise!
| Julie Haill chapter 5 . 12/28/2011
Aaaah, severus is so sweet, in the harry potter series he is this bad guy with the sneering and the nasty comments but I always felt really sorry for him. but in this story you show us his soft side. The warm caring and loving sev you portray is really adorable. please update again soon, I'm very anxious to read more.
| animefreakazoid01 chapter 5 . 12/26/2011
oh man what a great chapter i'm looking forward to the next :)
| TheAngelofIego chapter 5 . 12/26/2011
I loved this chapter!
| LoVeDoNtHaTe chapter 5 . 12/26/2011
Let's hope he's right! Please update soon! :)
| WomenAreFromMars chapter 4 . 12/23/2011
Awesome! I love the idea and it's really well written. Good work :)
| TheAngelofIego chapter 4 . 12/22/2011
| Zireael07 chapter 4 . 12/21/2011
I love the chapter. Especially the ending...
| NotJustAMuggle chapter 3 . 12/19/2011
Oh, wow! Big changes taking place in this story! Neville is going to become Lily's adopted son and later "the Boy-who-Lived". Always wondered what that would look like if it happened. And was the veritaserum reference inspired from my story? ;) If so, I am honored. Great story, I am excited to read more. How long are you planning on making it? You could change the entire history of the wizarding world as we know it.
| Zireael07 chapter 3 . 12/19/2011
Oh... poor Lily. What will happen now?
| flame55 chapter 2 . 12/18/2011
this is good
| NotJustAMuggle chapter 2 . 12/16/2011
Loved it! They are so cute together! Snape is such a good guy, deep down. A little harsh showing her the memory. I guess it was just too hard for him to say. You update fast! So keep doing it!
| Ruby-Elwood chapter 1 . 12/15/2011
Interesting premise! I am of course wondering why Voldemort wouldn't kill her, but once I went with it, I liked this story quite a bit. It's a little cliched, but in a good way. I especially liked the phrase "Lily lay in a pool of crimson"-it's a cool image :) I'd be interested to see how this continues. It's certainly intriguing to imagine Harry growing up with friends. Would his desire for revenge be as strong?
I like your succinct style and the way the action moves quickly. I'd suggest some more figurative language and varying your sentence structure a little bit. This is a solid story as it is, but you could spice it up a little more. Don't worry; you did a nice job.
On a related note, I'd like to refer to you www . rmimagic . com, a writing community set in the HP universe. They're currently accepting applications for transfer and first-year students, and I think you'd fit in really well. It's lots of fun, and you can explore different characters and scenarios. I hope to hear more from you one way or another! :)