|Reviews for Right Moments|
| Haremking001 chapter 14 . 4/19
What the heck happened to getting a technique that should be powerful enough to kill a god and the uncursing being a complex operation without boring dialog?!
| Cool Guest chapter 14 . 10/25/2022
Since the author asked, I came up with 3 ways the story could be changed to make climax of the story have been more emotionally involved. Not caring about how old the story is one bit.
1) The Bane of Heirs was never something that needed to be removed. It wasn't something that brought misery at any level, rather it was defined as a curse that made female members of the family choose the worst partners they would be happy with. Which on the flipside implies that all of them are guaranteed to be happy with the partners they end up choosing, even if they are, well, scumbags.
That means it was always just something Ranma wanted on a whim and the audience doesn't need to feel bad if he get it removed or not.
2) The moment Ranma switched between been driven to win, having faith that somehow, someday he would figure out a way to do it and Ranma losing hope and giving up was too sudden, and it would have benefited to drawn out more to create drama and tension, not knowing what will happen now that he had failed.
A) Describing in detail the cathalisis that it was to surrender. Ranma had worked so hard and for so long to win. When he once thought overcoming the challenge was inevitable, now it seemed impossible. His self-esteem and pride could have been more wounded.
And if Seruni had seemed neutral and ambiguous for a bit before agreeing to apologise instead of demonstrating herself to be immediately simphatetic and making the Revelation that for the gods it was all a premeditated course of events from the moment the curse was first cast to that moment. (When a kami sends a champion to make her daughter apologize for something that she will do, and only will do because that kami sent that champion her way. It's evident that the gods interact with reality in a very different way than we humans can relate)
Those things would have created some welcomed tension and doubt not knowing whether Ranma would succeed on this.
3) Last is the timing for Ranma giving up. It would be easier to sympathize with Ranma's change of attitude if the challenge had suddenly seemed significantly more hopeless than it was before.
There wasn't a fundamental distinction between Ranma's last attempt and the others. If anything he made more progress managing to land multiple attacks. That would have normally served to encourage him to go on, if he hadn't finally reached his limit and gotten too tired and frustrated. He had been at places before where he had no clue how to find a way to win and then allowed himself time to figure out another possible solution. But this time he gave up on the spot without further thinking. Rather than getting stuck without making progress for a long time before admitting he wasn't on a path to ever win. He just didn't feel like trying anymore at a moment he couldn't see a way forward.
That was a fun mental exercise, even if this feedback is never read by anyone.
PS: if I could know you read this, I would be surprised and pleased.
| Cool Guest chapter 3 . 10/2/2022
The Author has challenge me to try to predict how this story will go before reading further so I shall attempt to do so!
Character growth is a given, that's the major universal feature looping stories like this where the world around remains identical so the MC must change for the story to progress.
There was repeated hints and foreshadowing of sleeping around, it's practically a promise the story is made.
Then with Kodachi's answer I also see a mystery involving a mastermind that may or may not be looping as well. So a vilan to defeat beyond Happosai who I expect will merely be an antagonist.
Other than that standard looping shenanigans.
That's all I got,
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/2/2022
My God! This fic is now over eighteen years old!
Babies have now grown into adults in the time this story been up. Holy shit!
| agnar chapter 11 . 11/22/2019
story started good. but has gone way too far off course, spending far too much time on gods and demons and ignoring ranma's actual life. Lost interest.
| Derich chapter 18 . 3/2/2018
Thanks for the treat! (and favored)
| Ibskib chapter 18 . 1/3/2017
It feels like too much of a cop-out to not show who Ranma married, and to then not name her.
I would have loved to see the romantic progression that lead towards their marriage, instead of it all being skipped.
| kabs9000 chapter 3 . 4/10/2016
Seems very promising
| Ibskib chapter 6 . 3/8/2016
Groping my breasts a movie theater - Groping my breasts in a movie theater
does not regard us great respect - does not regard us with great respect
| Ibskib chapter 5 . 3/8/2016
I love the technique names, they are quite beautiful and evocative.
| Ibskib chapter 4 . 3/8/2016
expressed of bliss - expression of bliss
to learning with mind - to improving his mind
| Guest chapter 8 . 2/13/2016
what is happening
| EddyQ chapter 18 . 11/9/2015
Rare jewel in the rough. Loops stories are surprisingly scarce. Sincere gratitude to the author.
| PotKinRot chapter 18 . 7/23/2015
Beautifully written. And great for expanding my english vocabulary, there were lots of interesting new words that I had to look up and will hopefully remember. I had trouble identifying some side characters (there are just too many of them. In the original story, that is), and ended up simply ignoring them because I did not have the mangas at hand to look them up.
I found all characters to be very believable in their actions and behaviour. This was one of the stories best selling points to me: Near-instant immersion due to coherent and believable characters.
The Sudan arc was a good and creative idea, I enjoyed it. Thank you for the great story!
| bablezmithgmail chapter 18 . 6/9/2015
Enlightenment, and the road continues uninterrupted.