|Reviews for HVH Menggerumut necrophilia Newlin AKA afwan|
| Menoma-Minx chapter 1 . 12/18/2011
A quick apology for the hot mess... did a couple of random deletions of words, the most important of was this line,
"Worked off death shroud;god's work done getting;fear lessening;moment easier moving was!"
Losing the zombie entrance in a zombie story is kind of disconcerting, even if the story is about a mental freak job who rapes corpses, calls it therapy to justify it in his twisted little brain, and then gets raped by the zombie he intended to victimize thinking it was already permanently dead.
I'm not really sure what to do to salvage this. There's also a grammatical hot mess going on as well, in pretty much any ! Looking for anybody's advice here, Provided they can remember this supposed to be a humor piece... That just happens to be a little bit dark and linguistically challenged ;-)
| Suki59 chapter 1 . 12/18/2011
Well, I must admit, I'm not sure what happened here, but I declare it a challenge met anyway! Remind me to steer clear of Mr. Newlin when next we meet. Thanks, Menoma, for writing us an HVH story!