Lord Sanguine chapter 1 . 5/17/2012
Nice start. Write more. Soon.
Lord Luxion chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
Ok, I like the concept and Saturdays reaction BUT

You really need to sort out your major spelling and grammar errors. House should be a capital, as should be Sunday and Saturday, and Monday, and Will (when referring to the Architects Will).

Also, there is one major error. Saturday was the first denizen CREATED by the Architect, not BORN OF HER AND THE OLD-ONE. She is not Her daughter in the same sense Sunday is Her son. I don't know if this is an intentional deviation but please note this if it is. Also please decapitalise the preview, it looks rubbishy, and it would be nice if the piece had a proper title. You really need to get your work beta'd before you submit it...