|Reviews for Comfort And Joy|
| loonytunecrazy chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
Aw touching fic here
| Qoheleth chapter 1 . 12/20/2011
The concept was a marvelous one, but I can't honestly say that I think much of the treatment. The essential problem, I think, is that the narrative voice seems oddly impersonal; instead of being Victoria’s own thoughts put in the third person (which is what the story requires), it sounds like a commentary on those thoughts by a 21st-Century author who doesn’t feel herself at liberty to assume much historical knowledge on the part of her readers. This makes it hard for it to tug properly at our heartstrings.
My recommendation would be: spend a few months rereading the 19th-Century literary classics (Trollope and Yonge would probably be particularly good) until you can think like a Victorian without even trying, then come back and give this story a thorough overhaul. (And then let me know that the new version's up, because I'll definitely want to read it.)