|Reviews for They Shook Hands : Year 1 (New Version)|
| Pr0xim4 chapter 1 . 10/27
I've just found this story on reddit, while searching for opinions on a different one, and I'm so glad it caught my eye! Only one chapter in, but it's so good to see barely eleven year old children NOT being written to act, think and speak like mature lords and ladies! The characters seem so far compelling, and realistic, you're spot on as far as I'm concerned:) I'm curious where this story goes, you have my attention!
| maiqsmail chapter 13 . 8/31
Nice start, and good wording but I kinda lost interest near the middle. It's basically re-iteration of canon with few miniscule changes that ended Harry in Slytherin. It's slow going (this part is already longer than canon Book One and it starts after few chapters of canon!) and the changes are not so drastic (so far?) that I would be bothered to go through all the books again because why bother if plot points stay on the same rigid route?
I rather liked an alternate idea in another fanfic where Point Of Divergence was Severus overhearing that Hagrid would go after Potter brat and he volunteered instead of that big oaf. Leading to him finding Potter in situ under the stairs which shatters his preconceptions and completely derails slow burning canon plot and Voldi gets vanquished at the end of Year One.
| Spades231 chapter 19 . 8/7
This was really good. Well done all around.
| Eddiss Alanimi chapter 5 . 7/2
I was able to enjoy the fanfiction till the previous chapter but it is becoming unbearable. Characters are going OOC, especially Harry and Ron. It's not that I hate all changes. It made sense that Hagrid reacted badly to Harry talking to Malfoys. Hagrid is biased against Slytherins (and introduced it to Harry) and he knew that Lucius is a death eater.
But the behavior of Ron and Harry don't make sense. Harry originally disliked Draco before anyone introduced any bias. Harry was strongly reminded of Dursley when he met Draco and the Slytherin gangs behavior should make it difficult for Harry to get along with them. But he is actively engaging in their behavior (but I can see scope for change in his character).
The most offensive change however is done to Ron. Ron the death eater is my most hated character trope and this fanfiction seems to be going in the same route. The first fight between Ron and Draco was started by Draco insulting Ron's family. Draco was the one who constantly antagonized Ron not the opposite. Ron never actively pursued Draco and he never seemed to have an active bias against Slytherins. Even Harry was more biased against Slytherins because of Draco's behavior and Hagrid's explanation.
Please stop destroying Ron's character. If you don't like Ron just ignore him in your story. It is easy to sideline him as he is not a very active character. If Harry was not his friend, he would probably end up as a decent average wizard who likes to goof around time to time. He is not a genius, not a bully, not a hero, he is just a normal dude who minds his own business. If you want a Gryffindor jerk who irritates Slytherins pick Cormac McLaggen or some OC. Cormac is pretty good example of an irritating jock with no brains or personality.
| clarelissy chapter 1 . 5/13
I’m looking forward to reading this a lot! Found it on reddit 3
| Murica69 chapter 1 . 5/5
If you are going to use the “I thought you would be taller” line you should make a crossover between Harry Potter and Escape from New York/ LA.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/7
| suraj chapter 19 . 3/1
should mr malfoy have any grudge againsat harry now in cannonn we dont know did mr malfoy gfight with lilly evans potter yes he does hate the weasleys and mudbloods was a he amurderer maybe even the weasleys what if the weaslys seduce and kill poepla adn take away their money we only see things from a gryffindore perspective ntofroma aslytherin point of view whaich is why slytherins are a the villaint he dark lord being from slytherin house remember it is a war people die dumbledore is cunning manipulative despit beign gryffindor scarificing other s for the grreater good maybe luciss malfoy was a doublee agent for dumbledaore and voldermort he didnt know that harry potter was an hocrux maybe he knoew what the diary was he did want ot kill geinvera weaslay we dont know would voldemort entrust one of his hocruxs to lucius malfoy remember he didnt trust anywone even dumbeldore didnt trusta anyonle ron weasly would be the leader of gryffonr how about ahryr and pansy parkinson dont go by beauty nice to see that pasny parkisnson crabbe goyle and rent so predudiced at all maybe harry should explaing the advantages of muggles sceince technology etc brign muggles intot he magic world and draco coudl tell his point of view or what if malfoy used the killing curse beause he knew that harry potter had an hocrux inside his head what if the diary plan waas a plan by dimbledore snape and lucisu so that ginny gets stuck inside the acahmber of secrets and harry ptter rescues her destroys kills the diarya dn the basilisk
| suraj chapter 17 . 3/1
harry could be the new leader also in this what if vodermort woukdnt exist iam also debating that harry gets the diary the diary merges with harry doesnt kill him tom riddle jr and voldermort merge inside ahrrys conciousness but the mothers slove anfd magic changes them into netutral more towards good harry woudl iuse dark magic because it is the ijtent and not the magic you could kill maim injute hypntoize rape with light and white magic
| ArkhCthuul chapter 3 . 2/17
Rereading this again.
One can't believe how much antipathy granger causes when not the main characters lexicon in legs...
And in a bookworm with too eager a mouth since first class may self... Sigh.
Andlywqy, VERY well done
| ArachnidHiveMind chapter 13 . 12/12/2022
The greatest casualty of this story is, and no matter who dies, will continue to be, Hedwig. (except maybe Hermione, I love her, and always hate for her to be die or something because Harry isn’t around, tho that normally happens at Halloween on first year if it is)
| ArachnidHiveMind chapter 10 . 12/11/2022
Theo casually being the most gryffindorish Slytherin ever
| ArachnidHiveMind chapter 4 . 12/11/2022
Hermione is a hufflepuff…. how
| ArachnidHiveMind chapter 4 . 12/11/2022
| Bakeku67 chapter 18 . 12/9/2022
What has it got, in its nasty pocketses?!