|Reviews for strangers like me|
| AncientTide chapter 1 . 7/22/2014
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/1/2012
| exogenesissymph chapter 1 . 1/7/2012
| Jocasta Silver chapter 1 . 1/2/2012
I love it! You really capture Annabeth's emotions, and I like her first impressions of Percy.
| Tokoloshe Monster chapter 1 . 1/2/2012
Herm. I have mixed feelings about this fic.
Firstly, the title. :O Just wonderful. I luuurve the title with pathetic joy. I don't know why, but I do. Just. All the feeellings.
I enjoyed the first scene, but I don't think there was quite enough emotion. We see that Annabeth is leaving, but we don't really get what's going on in her head - she's running away; that's a huge, daunting task for someone her age. And we aren't exposed to her thoughts or much of her motivation.
There are flickers of what she's going through, but no real finality. :/
I found the POV hange to her father a bit unsettling and unneeded. :/ I mean, it didn't really add *that* much to the tale, as well as the fact that this is Annabeth-centric - meaning, you know, mainly Annabeth. POV changes like that should be done for omnipresent perspectives, methinks. It's like we're in Annabeth's head THE WHOLE EXCEPT FOR THIS PART HERE FOR NO REAL REASON. It just feels like we were suddenly uprooted while reading.
...Eh. The hill scene is really, really overdone. I won't say much on it because of that. There wasn't anything fresh or interesting added to that cliche in this fandom, so again, not really needed. I mean, it's done better than most times I've read it, but there was no new spin on it.
I liked the last scene, though. :) Definitely in-character, and it definitely was pretty groovy. It's something very Annabeth-like. Cute, too. _
The prose here wasn't your best, either. It was good, but at no point in the fic did I feel moved, you know?
So yeah. In the end, it felt like a lot of the usual stuff found around here.
Keep writing. Xxx
| Proud to be Plug chapter 1 . 12/26/2011
This is… okay, I guess. It's well-written, and you hit the right emotional notes.
I liked the first scene, where Annabeth left home. I think that part is an interesting, original take on that point in Annabeth's life. After that, though, I wasn't too pushed on the rest. Please don't take this the wrong way; I'm not trying to be rude. But, the whole Annabeth/Luke getting to camp with the Thalia death scene has been done a lot. An awful lot. So by this stage I'm not sure if anything new or interesting can come out of a rendering of that scene. That's not to say your writing of that scene here is bad in any way; I just don't think it's particularly original.
However, the first scene with Annabeth leaving home is definitely original, and I enjoyed that part.
You said to tell you of any tense mix-ups, so here is a few:
She smiled at a stern-looking woman on a cell phone and walks away, scouting out a place to stay for the night. She found a warm ventilator behind a restaurant and gets a nice view of a sparse group of trees. She changed into her pajamas, settled down behind some trashcans and gets out her hammer.
Luke turns the knife in his hands around and gives it to her. Wide-eyed, she takes the hilt and stares at her reflection in the polished brown-gold metal.
Hope this review helps!
| HolyChizNuggets chapter 1 . 12/25/2011
That was beautiful! Keep on writing :)
| Interludes chapter 1 . 12/25/2011
Theia, love, this was wonderful. (:
- and happy Christmas to you too!