|Reviews for L'Order Noir|
| MusikalRayn chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
Amazing! Really love how you did this story.
| Bell J chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
I'm trying to read this, but I come from a country that no one learn french... translating some words will be great :)
| darket15 chapter 1 . 11/4/2012
This is a new twist for Kanda! But is seems he cleans up well to look like a man after he's in street clothes. I'd love to see if this one could continue on, because Kanda is so sexy in his dance clothes! But Allen seems so taken by him!
| spinninground chapter 1 . 10/29/2012
Ohhh, I see! They're going to his hotel so that Allen can read Kanda some of his poetry, right? EH?
Anyways, love the setting, and the absinthe tastes horrible, but the lights seem - not brighter, but as though it's possible to pick apart every speck of their radiance. Of course, maybe that's what perfect vision feels like. Or perhaps, the vaunted lucidity is not a lie, though having the effect extend to mental function might be.
I'm going to keep stalking you later. You can pretty much count on it. But don't worry, I don't tend to follow my obsessions to their homes or tap their phones or hide under their beds. Or tell them lies. Like the angel said, "Do not be afraid, for you will soon mysteriously conceive a child out of wedlock." (was that mix of biblical and raep threat out of line? You be the judge!)
| PearlesantlRose chapter 1 . 10/28/2012
I liked this one too! It was brilliant!
| qweddcv chapter 1 . 10/27/2012
oh how i love how you write
| Hikaru113 chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
This story is AMAZING! MARVELOUS! BEAUTIFUL! I just fell in love with it. I really like the French theme. It makes the story very elegant (I'm not quite sure how to explain it) And I like how there is a definite difference between Burlesque and a strip club. It was great how you used side characters like Lavi, Lenalee, Eliade, Komui, and Miranda. Hahaha and Tykki the stalker. I would absolutely LOVE to read a sequal. This story is just so great. I love the relationship you have made between Allen and Kanda. I am a complete Yullen fangirl so I was very happy to read such a creative story. Thank you SO MUCH!
| hanabimonai chapter 1 . 10/13/2012
Hahaha... I love this! Especially Allen pursuing Kanda despite himself.
I hope you do do the drabbles. :)
| Kaidious chapter 1 . 5/4/2012
excellent flow of story and i like the scene where kanda appear at the porch lots
thanks for writing! ;]
| Eventideless chapter 1 . 4/13/2012
This story is absolutely fabulous! XDD I love the Yullen/Arekan mix! The ending pretty much satisfy me
| Chowa-chan chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
C'était troooop mignon ( it was soooo cute ) !
This one-shot was amazing, and well, mesmerising.
I really loved the part :"Jesus. Didn't know you had such a vendetta against the French. Is it the berets?"
And when they were talking in french, this was sooo cute !
But, there were some little mistakes :
-when Eliade call Allen "Cheri", it's "chéri", and put a capital letter isn't really correct since French is some annoying language, put a capital letter here is considerate like a fault. But it doesn't really matter.
-It'll better if you write "s'il-vous-plaît" and not "s'il vous plait", cause French is still a pain in the...heeerm.
- when Lavi said " Somethin' wrong, Beau ?" and all the phrase when he say Beau, there must be a "mon" before "beau".
- when Lavi said "une autre ?", there's a mistake. It's " Un autre ?"
- when Lenalee said " Frère is very…protective of me…", there must be a "mon" before frère.
I didn't undersand what you meant by " Cas au point", 'cause, it's senseless in french x)
- It'd be better to say " L'Amour, mon ami !" and not "Amour, mon ami !"..."L'Amour,"
- The correct spelling for deboneire is "débonnaire".
I didn't understand what you meant by "éventer la mèche", maybe you wanted to say "Ne vend pas la mèche". And I loved the "ferme ta bouche !" but, "ferme-la !" would be better.
- If you wanted to say "what the hell" and put "ce que l'enfer", well, it's doesn't have sense in french...and I don't really know how translate that. Maybe "Putain!" but it's vulgar ( even if a lot of us say that x) ) so, perhaps "Punaise !"
- Don't put a "s" at "excité", because it's the singular.
- "Euh non, pas vraiment" should be remplaced by " euh non, plus vraiment."
- Don't put a "e" at "Je suis désolée" because Komui is a man, not a woman.
- "Se préparer" isn't correct here as it's the infinitive of a pronominal verb. "Perpare-toi" is correct.
- "Vous savez. You and Lotus". Since Lavi and Allen can be considerated like friends, Lavi "tutoie" ( hell, there no traduction for this ! French is just so- aaaah !) Allen, so, say " Tu sais" wuld be better.
- We can say "germe de soja" BUT "pousse de soja" is way better. Don't I ask me why, because I don't really know why it is better, although we always say "pousse de soja" or Moyashi in our dear french fanfiction.
- It's be better to say "s'il-te-plaît" and not "s'il-vous-plaît", as Allen seems a little familiar to Kanda.
Aaaaaaaaaand that's all :) !
But it's amazing ! A-ma-ziiing ! Damn, I'm still jumping and singing "fuck you" by Lily Allen while I'm writting xD.
Au revoir !
PS : hey ! we're not that weak when it comes to war ! We're just pacific ! And the German are just mean, mean, mean ! xD.
| Carolnuts chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
you see , I'm not a big fan of yuullen myself, and at first I didn't know this was a yaoi fic.
you know what, I don't care, your writting style is marvelous, and you made me shameless want a gay lemon -that's not something you see everyday .
"Don't make me kill you. You know how flawed this judicial system is. I will get away with it." was the final blow. I'm in love.
| g chapter 1 . 2/19/2012
like it hi there is this amazing bl game and it is alos a drama cd (the game and cd are in japanes but you can get the translaton on google) and manga called Lucky Dog 1 Blast or just Lucky Dog 1 but the manga is not bl it just implys it and it NEEDS MORE LOVE please cheack it out and tell others about it its about Gian Carlo Bourbon Del Monte, a young member of the mafia, is better known by his nickname "Lucky Dog" due to his incredible good luck. Despite knowing that he can escape with just a little effort, Gian decides to take a break from the fast-and-furious lifestyle while being imprisoned in a maximum-security jail. But when four young mafia captains are captured and brought to the same prison, the Boss of their syndicate makes a certain request of Gian... please help this amazing game/manga get more attention it needs alot more love it is too good tell me what you think about it please I AM BEGGING YOU . for game and cd translations and 2010/06/23/bl-game-review-%E2%80%93%C2%A0lucky%C2%A0dog1/ read the manga too lucky-dog-1-blast IT NEEDS MORE LOVE
| Angel Fantasy chapter 1 . 1/25/2012
Entrancing and cute
| Starisia the Shadow Demon chapter 1 . 1/6/2012
Fabuleux! Tout simplement splendide! Haha, sorry i really couldn't resist.
I LOVED this! honestly this is by far the BEST fic I have read in a LONG time.
Your descriptions were MARVELOUS! It was honestly a wonderful piece.
This actually had me laughing my head off in someplaces and just going 'Awww! So Kawaii!' in others. I'm serious i can NOT remember the last time I loved a fic this much. Its just so hard to find fanfics that are this wonderful and original, and ENTERTAINING!
Lol, this; "Don't make me kill you. You know how flawed this judicial system is. I will get away with it," is now my all time favoritte Kanda threat EVER! Lol, Mind if i borrow it sometime? I just think it was pure genius.
I'm sad to say that i don't think I'll EVER be able to find a fic I love this much again, no matter how hard I look.
You are truely a marvelous writer and i am DESPERATELY hoping to read another wonderful fic by you sometime soon.
I know I'm getting repetative but i can't think of any other way to tell you how much i loved this so-to avoid going on all night-I'm just going to leave it at extraordinary, marvelous, original, and WONDERFULY written.