|Reviews for That Alluring Taste|
| A Cold War Historian chapter 1 . 8/4/2012
| anon chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
I like the idea you had going, but the descriptions weren't vivid enough, and the grammar needed work. And some information was just random and unrelated to the story. An example was when you mentioned that Zero was a hunter, so he was very buff. The fact that he was a hunter isn't concerning how sexy he was at the moment in the story. You could, instead, go into detail about how his muscles looked, and how exactly they were sexy. Again, I'm just giving a few pointers here, and am not meaning to be offensive, but the sentence structure was a bit choppy and simple, and the lack of use of commas made reading a bit difficult.
Overall, I honestly think it is a nice idea, and has great potential. It just needs a bit more plot development, grammar correcting, and more explicit descriptions.
| Tigress Herondale chapter 1 . 5/5/2012
Great, nice lemon.
| Kashi-Cookie-Monster chapter 1 . 4/24/2012
Nice oneshot there :) I love the Game, the setting and the lapdance, I have to say that that may have been close to genius :P One thing though, some of the actions towards the end are methodical. I think that it would really help, particularly with the sex scene if you focused purely on senses and emotions as an excersize to really get into the feel of it. Good job and keep writing,
| The Sandman's Daughter chapter 1 . 1/8/2012
Wow. XD Amazing!
| Paru0 chapter 1 . 12/26/2011
Yay! I love Zeki thank you beautifully written.
| Little-bad-Angel chapter 1 . 12/26/2011
omg...that was hot...i can't stop blushing...why are vampires only fictional D: ...awesome one shot! Keep up the great work!