Reviews for Trackers
Monki-Neko chapter 2 . 1/8/2012
not to nitpick, but perhaps you should explain the information outside of dialogue for the most part? it just feels like the dialgue is now a filler b/c the only interaction is b/w merton and the cerb. i believe interaction between any characters, human or otherwise can be meaningful and a wolfbear YOU created is not going to be able to communicate w/ merton, especially as he's an empath as well? i don't think so. i think you should have stretched out the chapter more since there's so much information involved. nice explanation for what he's doing somewhere other than the mortal realm tho.
Monki-Neko chapter 1 . 1/6/2012
i've never seen this take on the fandom before; can't wait to see where you take it! your grammer is fine and the pace is good, it might be a good idea to try and explain the background of the world the story occurs in with more detail, however. it was easy enough for me to understand what was what in this first chapter but maybe that's just because i read waaay too much fanfiction. .?