|Reviews for Captured Prince|
| Megan chapter 7 . 8/24/2013
When is the next chaper! I love this anime! I hope you update soon! I think maybe in the story there should be prince arslan taking a bath and some perverts try to sneak a peek of arslan's body and daryoon and the other save the day!
| Joybug chapter 7 . 8/21/2013
I like where this story is going so far. You've kept everyone true to character and while sometimes OOC is more than welcome, its always refreshing to read a fanfic that more resembles the characters true personalities. I hope you continue with this. You're doing a great job so far and its so hard to find Arslan fanfics anymore.
| Ari chapter 7 . 7/21/2013
Read all stories you submitted...
Very enjoyable and wished there were more episode to read.
| Leese chapter 6 . 3/23/2012
well done chapter! You've really improved your writing with this chapter.
Just two teensy typos: use 'too' instead of 'to' when showing the reader that there is more of something. ex: there is too much food at this table.
'cocubine' is spelled 'concubine.'
Keep it going. I'd like to see how you end this story.
| Leese chapter 4 . 3/19/2012
I have to stop reading this now. The grammar and spelling mistakes are so irritating. The dialogue doesn't flow either. It's choppy, full of spelling mistakes and so out of character. Please use a spell checker, fix the issues and then re-upload the story.
| Leese chapter 3 . 3/17/2012
You've got the good bones to a story, however, it needs work: Grammar and spelling mistakes need to be looked over and fixed.
Kharlan never wanted to be king, in the series. He wanted Hermes to be king.
He's also a coward, so cutting down Arslan and the repercussions are something he does not want to deal with.
It would really help you to do some research about the subject you're writing about.
According to the anime, Arslan is 14 when his father sends him out on his own. You have him as 16. He has aqua hair, not green tinged with gold.
No 14 year old, no matter what atrocities they witness, can withhold emotions from their face/eyes when being tortured.
It may be your age or that you're a beginning writer, I'm not sure which, but doing some research and using a spell checker will help improve your writing greatly!
Keep writing. Don't ever stop. You have a good start to a good story.
| Gurgicalcipher chapter 7 . 1/3/2012
Another great chapter! Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next update!
| Gurgicalcipher chapter 6 . 12/30/2011
This is really good! Just read all six chapters in one sitting. Keep up the good work!