|Reviews for Planless|
| Blake2020 chapter 28 . 8/15
| Blake2020 chapter 3 . 8/15
| Blake2020 chapter 1 . 8/15
| Ikrani chapter 4 . 10/31/2016
Oh God... The typos... They never end...
I mean, I'll admit I have a few here and there, but I've been seeing sentences that look like whole thoughts have been forgotten. "The day after Minato [did something because you need a verb and this makes no sense otherwise, and a comma,] Shiina..."
Admittedly, I'm guilty of that, too, but that's why I try to go back after my new chapter's posted and do another read-through. Gets the typos to come out of hiding.
| Ikrani chapter 2 . 10/31/2016
I know this is an old story but, seriously, there had to have been SOME way to divide the scenes up. Or maybe there was and FF just took them down for some asinine reason. Either way, take note, all who read here:
A scene break, funny enough, helps the reader's mind run more smoothly. Having to shift gears and figure out a new scene without warning pulls away from the story.
Also, why would Tsukiumi agree to help unwinged Sekirei find their Ashikabi if
1) She hates Ashikabis
2) She doesn't like humans much anyway
and 3) She still thinks Sekirei are meant to fight.
There's no motivation or reason given for her to even CONSIDER Homura's offer, never mind accept it. Yeah, it's interesting and all, but why should Tsukiumi care? Her objectives clearly remain unchanged, so her motives will as well.
| Guest chapter 28 . 7/25/2016
poor Minato; having over twenty kids and 30 wives and that's within the first year and half. How many more kids will he end up with? But 10/10 excellent work with intelligent Minato.
| 7137 chapter 12 . 11/20/2015
Mutsu is #5 and Kakizaki is an Ashikabi
| Guest chapter 21 . 9/24/2015
i wonder if sanada has 6 sekirei like in cannon
| Guest chapter 17 . 9/24/2015
so shina is stronger than in cannon and are 9 and 6 still protecting the unwinged?
| maxe03 chapter 16 . 9/24/2015
wow are yukari and shina stupid or do they just have delusions of grandier
| maxe03 chapter 12 . 9/24/2015
i wonder what number karasuba is if mutsu is number 4 and if number 8 is still around
| maxe03 chapter 5 . 9/23/2015
wow so they ran a train on him his stamina must be incredible that or viagra
| maxe03 chapter 3 . 9/23/2015
didnt see that coming
| maxe03 chapter 2 . 9/23/2015
just wow he talks about making his own but gets an allowence and never thought to go home why? Really you owe someone who experimented on you and your people for not treating you to badly
| Morrison512 chapter 28 . 7/13/2015
Wonderful story loved it :D cant wait to see more Sekirei storys from you if you decide to write more.