Reviews for Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Heart of the Storm
Momo chan chapter 23 . 8/8/2016
Just so you know, I still love this story. Even if it never gets updated again... ;w; I hope you are okay!
Guest chapter 23 . 5/26/2016
When will you update
Guest chapter 23 . 2/24/2016
Love this story, found it a couple weeks ago and I'm pretty upset that it's not completed, four years since an update also sucks because it will probably never be finished, oh well, still great story
Guest chapter 4 . 10/18/2015
WHAT?! CHIKORITA'S A BAD GUY?! Still a great story though.
P.S. Snivy would've worked better as a bully than Chikorita . . .
Guest chapter 3 . 10/18/2015
I'm calling it right now - Amp Plains Tribe.
Guest chapter 2 . 10/18/2015
WAIT. A. SECOND. The tribe that Sterling keeps talking about is the Amp Plains Tribe you have to battle in Explorers of Time and Darkness, right?
Guest chapter 1 . 10/18/2015
Is this first chapter based on Warrior Cats at all? Because it sounds like it . . .
ascendingStars chapter 1 . 10/14/2015
Hundreth review. You deserve it! This story was an amazing red, and I cannot wait for the next chapter (if any!) Good job!
BroadBlueSky chapter 23 . 10/10/2015
Typhoon is the friendliest "big" pokemon yet, and I love him.
Talgoran chapter 6 . 5/25/2015
- Nice violent beginning. I liked that you started the story with a bang, even if it was the fairly cliche mother fleeing with son and dying to protect him. Got a Lion King vibe, understandably.
- Glad you put in some mysteries and unanswered questions right off the bat too. Good to have something to keep people reading right?
- Why would you spoil that Blaize has poisonous claws in a freaking author's note? Have you heard of 'Show don't tell'?
- Blaize's kindness up until Chapter 4 or 5 is to the point of ridiculous cardboard cutout. He's almost a caricature. He doesn't even bat an eye when Sterling asks him to to stay while he falls asleep. I mean, you can be a generous and comforting person (er, Pokemon), and still have a reaction a weird request like that. I'm guessing they're both supposed to be somewhere between age 8 and 13, so having your young friend ask you that would definitely be strange.
- I liked the sincere and intense longing that Blaize had to join the academy that came out when Sterling offhandedly suggested it. The first real depth to his character too.
- Overall, pretty typical beginning though. Like, really typical. Tragic backstory of quiet and sad main character, found by upbeat friendly sidekick, show new kid around town, adventure hook, off we go.
- Your names are...hrm. Auriane? Blaize? I like Sterling to be fair, that's kinda clever to a degree that far surpasses Blaze with an added letter, or Aura turned into a name. I understand it's PMD and having simple names that are based off qualities or species names is totally fair. For some reason though, these names sorta made me cringe to be honest.
- You mention at one point Blaize acting against his normally humorous personality. But I think his personality is super wishywashy. At first he was unnaturally and robotically kind and hospitable. Then he jarringly became a jokester bro. He ended up around Chapter 5 as a teenager sidekick friend type character. So it's hard to say he was not acting in tune with his normal self since he lacks one.
- Team Never, especially Auriane, is super hackneyed. I don't think any Dojo needs a wizened old monk character who meditates and sees the potential of youth. Ugh.
- I'm stopping reading here for a few reasons. Heavy use of cliche, lack of meaningful plot other than allusions to Sterling's past, slow pacing, overload of preparation filler that I wish was summarized by "They hung out in the Dojo and joined the Academy and then plot occurred."
- Sorry, I know my critiques are harsh and all that. I enjoyed reading the time that I did, and I learned some things for my own fanfiction writing. Thank you for spending the time to make this cool story!
LololololBro7265 chapter 23 . 4/15/2015
Great story. I love it! Keep up the good work!
blackkyurem10 chapter 23 . 10/25/2014
This is one of the best fanfics i've seen in a long time but i was wondering does he still make more of these? I sort of new to this.
PokeSpeBanette chapter 23 . 7/17/2014
heyyyy...hope you don't mind, but i'm gonna make a story sort of based off my own game, and this story. don't worry, I won't steal the entire thing, just about the ideas with the Teams and the Academy a few other stuff. i'll give credit to this story don't worry.
PokeSpeBanette chapter 9 . 6/18/2014
what's raze supposed to be? it never said
Shinyninja chapter 19 . 6/10/2014
ha, she ain't even E.V. trained yet my SceptileL.V. 91 could whoop her Poke-ass bet she's only
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