|Reviews for War in Tokyo|
| ttripled chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
Awesome story, well told. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing!
| Wonderbee31 chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
It looks like Ranma is not going to show any mercy to the Monsters, and the Dark Generals would be smart to be wary if they run into him soon, and will be looking forward to what happens when he meets some of the other folk involved in defense of the City, as well as what might happen if the Generals gain all the power they feel is needed.
| Rune Tobor chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
Well its a good update. Nice long chapter too, but you say its hard to continue? Log out and post any outline you have as a review and others can give suggestions. One idea I have is that Ranma and a few others should invade the dark kingdom to both rescue any they can and kill the queen. With her death the dark kingdom will fall apart and the dark generals might even fight each other. Ami should be able to figure out how to make a portal to the dark kingdom. Thanks for the fic.
| Rexnos chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
It's kind of a sprawling story. I'm not surprised you're having issues with it. You're using at least four different sources for your characters and, being you, you're doing your damnedest to keep them in character. That's on top of balancing power levels, keeping up the tension and preparing for future plot points.
In any case, it's been pretty interesting so far. I liked the first chapter a bit more as there was more action, but I feel like you're slowly setting the scene for a big fight. I liked Ranma's response to the situation and Cologne's direct acquittal of her abilities. Jupiter's fight had some pretty interesting descriptions as well. It's always interesting to read about people who just like to fight.
I'm feeling like the dark generals are going to end up underpowered. Considering that they're the only seriously powerful bad guys and that several of the good guys can one v one them, I'm feeling the climactic confrontations are going to be a bit of anti-climax. The generals will be able to take out peons with ease, but Ranma, the dragon, Cologne, the sailors and a few other characters will roflstomp them. Still, I suppose that can be fun to read too.
Anyway, great stuff. Keep it up once you've got it all worked out.
| Zealot of Reading chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
Great chapter, hope to see more updates soon!
| SuperiorShortness chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
Hope you think about some new material soon.
| bakapervert chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
Thanks for the update.
| neb1234 chapter 2 . 2/11/2012
| karthik9 chapter 2 . 2/10/2012
it is excellent chapter i look forward to future updates
| lordamnesia chapter 2 . 2/10/2012
Utterly incredible! This keeps up the awesomeness from the first chapter, and develops it further, in such a way that I expect to see a bigger confrontation in the next chapter, or rather that's what appears to be building up. Keep up the super-awesome-mega-cool work!
| SuperiorShortness chapter 1 . 2/6/2012
Fun stuff. All your plots are always so originally glorious...
| Sora with an S chapter 1 . 1/27/2012
Science beats magic any day, as the wielders of science know roughly what they are doing. Go the military! Kill those things!
| RuneTobor chapter 1 . 1/23/2012
Well its fun. I found it because you mentioned what I think is this fic in a review of "Hell is a Martial Artist". Looking forward to the next part. Thanks.
| Ancalador chapter 1 . 1/21/2012
An interesting story so far. I'm looking forward to seeing you complete it.
Keep up the great work
| psychoticdrow chapter 1 . 1/11/2012
Great story so far, I recognize where most of the characters are pulled from, but not the Billy Goats Gruff group, are they OCs or from some more obscure series that I haven't come across yet? Either way, I'm a fan of all your work that I've had the opportunity to read, keep on writing and updating.