Reviews for Fatty |
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Pink Bead Girl chapter 23 . 12/12/2014 " Love you too, snotface." Made me sigh with happiness, you can only talk like that to someone you really love. Hope it stays that way. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 22 . 12/12/2014 Glad Edward didn't punch Riley. Will be interesting to see where this goes. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 19 . 12/12/2014 Had to laugh at the Xbox and nipple comparison, there's a phrase you don't read every day! What an amazing girl Bella is with her soft erotic touch to Edward's belly and then quietly licking her fingers. She's so wonderful to him, and yet so anxious about herself. They both need to see what great people they are. Lovely chapter again. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 16 . 12/12/2014 Lovely mind pictures as Edward imagines himself with Bella as he sits on his sofa. And you made me laugh yet again with the line, " Seriously...even dogs wouldn't eat those things..." Well done. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 15 . 12/12/2014 So glad he kissed her. Nice. And about gaining a little weight as you diet and exercise, it's not anything too terrible really as long as it doesn't get out of hand. My doctor tells me that as you gain muscle and lose fat, the scale can show more because lean muscle is heavier than fat. So no need for despair! |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 14 . 12/12/2014 A moment of trust between them with the exchange of the package. I liked how Edward cleaned her up and settled her in bed with such a gentlemanly manner. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 13 . 12/12/2014 Now there's a twist! Am so intrigued to find out what is the problem that Bella has with being told she's loved. Maybe just like Edward, she doesn't feel she's good enough either. Great cliffhanger. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 12 . 12/12/2014 Beautifully erotic scene in the shower. Great chapter again. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 8 . 12/12/2014 Had to laugh at the cute way you wrote Edward finding that there was something interesting that had been hidden by his belly after all. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 7 . 12/12/2014 I like the little touches of humour in your writing, as in Edward having a life-sized cut out of Lara Croft, lol. And whether or not to peek up Bella's skirt. You cover the whole aspect of Edward so nicely. Funny, serious, yearning, it's a great mix. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 6 . 12/12/2014 Sweet moment when the little spark went off between Alice and Jasper. I liked how Edward was the "bigger man" and gave Rosalie that lovely hug. Your portrayal of Edward is just lovely. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 5 . 12/12/2014 You captured the horrible truth very well here, many people do judge others solely on how they look and it's so unfair. I like Edward saying that he didn't become better at his job, he just became thinner, and then when he got mad about it, he went and worked it off instead of eating the anger away. Love your story, so real. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 3 . 12/12/2014 I'm glad to see the early motivation here for Edward. Glad to see he's coping when Rosalie needles him. Best line , "...get off my ass about the size of my ass..." Made me laugh out loud. |
Pink Bead Girl chapter 2 . 12/12/2014 I like this story a lot already. I find stories where not every one is shiny, shiny perfect to be more interesting because it's more real. Broke my heart to read that Edward cried after finding out his weight. Good start and I am looking forward to more. |
Tarbecca chapter 1 . 10/28/2014 Recommended this story in the Fic Dive over at ADF. Thi just melts my heart. |