Reviews for A Pure White Ikarimas
death angel shadow kat chapter 1 . 7/26/2012
XD
xRissychanx chapter 1 . 1/6/2012
How cute :3
pokemonSLR chapter 1 . 1/4/2012
wow this is brilliant n_n

i loved how the mistletoe was set up on them both (fangirl screams)XD

Poor shinji XD He didnt know where to put himself, thier just had to be a

camera somewhere

this is an aweome ikaimas fic n_n
Farla chapter 1 . 1/3/2012
[Satoshi, Hikari, and Takeshi had camped in a forest near Tobari City (Veilstone City). They would've been able to ask Reiji (Reggie) and Shinji (Paul) ]

If you're going to do this just use the English names in the first place.

["Well, it was Christmas Eve, and we thought we might be interfering a bit," Takeshi nervously laughed. ]

Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned or "Hello." he grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it." And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.

[a male Yukinooh (Abomasnow) ]

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Bradley8155 chapter 1 . 1/2/2012
Awwwwww! I loved it! It was so adorable!