|Reviews for TLOS: Sparx the Dragon|
| The RPG Master chapter 1 . 4/26
Tell me, does Sparx actually become a Dragon in this story?
| The1upguy chapter 4 . 4/21
I apologize for the last review, but I appear to have insulted someone who don't like fan fiction. I didn't want to get into a contest with this guy, but to post a review upon my story, after I ignored him is just childish.
I wish I never replied to his first message, and I wish he would get the message
I am not here to become famous, but to have fun and get away from the struggle of real life.
| Nickolaus Pacione chapter 4 . 4/21
You want to slam journalists who don't understand full length work that's characters where one doesn't understand how one gets celebrated for things that don't belong to them. I am not doing this as a slam on you but you're about my age and the realization there is a time in your life you need to put away childish things. That's where I am coming from where I had produced six books (four returning to print,) publish a magazine where my roster one of them is a writing coach and writing instructor.
I am the go-to for a lot of fanwork writers to become published in the short form so you think I am full of shit on that one go check out my anthologies and you will know what I mean - I had edited nine anthologies but trying to get them back in circulation. Don't shit on people who give you a chance - I don't really understand the 100,000 word fan novel length work.
What my contributor said, "I am not a fan of fan fiction," that would be Fred Wiehe who said that on linked in as I had found writeforward and I can show you the article but hey if you want to be a butthead to those who are semi-professional and career writers, those career authors were trying to do nothing but help you. Take my advice on this one - educate yourself on video bloggers because when they are able to go into great depth as a video blogger then put that video bloggers voice to the work they write that's original; then you might have an understanding what I am saying so if you're thinking I am speaking 'gibberish' now but I really don't understand fannish word salads.
| Alec the Dark Angel chapter 3 . 2/4
One thing you should always try to avoid is piss off Spyro. But one thing you should do even less than that is mess with Cynder. Because when you mess with Cynder, Spyro will make sure it's the last thing you ever do.
Seriously though, Spyro was only hanging onto life by a thread. Then that giant messes with Cynder, and Spyro's strength increases to 50 times his full strength. Although, anyone who has played TLoS: The Eternal Night would know that Dark Spyro's power is insanely more powerful than normal. Although, anyone who's played Skylanders would consider Dark Spyro as barely any stronger than normal Spyro.
Oh, and I love how you referenced Mega Ram Spyro.
| Alec the Dark Angel chapter 2 . 1/29
I just realized that your interpretation of the Chronicler is similar to The Doctor in Doctor Who. Once his time is up, he takes on a new form. Taking on a new personality, but still containing the memories of his previous lives.
| Alec the Dark Angel chapter 1 . 1/27
Personally, I like it when writers portray characters in a different way than what's commonly known. For example, your portrayal of Spyro is as an older version. As time goes on, people change. Often people will portray an older Spyro as being like that young dragon from the games, or as a battle hardened warrior. You probably portrayed Spyro so realistically, he's probably more real than some real life people. And then you portrayal of Ignitus, or rather, the Chronicler in general. The body is simply a conduit through which the vast knowledge of the Chronicler is passed through the ages. And that certainly beats a new Chronicler having to read all of those books all over again to gain that knowledge. Admittedly, Spyro being as praised as he is is a bit cliche. But he did save the entire planet after all.
| Nanowarp67 chapter 1 . 10/10/2014
THIS STORY IS SO AWESOME. I finished it not to long ago and since there is no comment section for the entire story I decided to write it here. Really this is good, very well writte. It really gets you with all the feels doesn't it, assaulted everywhere by them but that's what makes it so very very good and so I abslolutely loved it. I hope that the second book is longer then the first but not everything can be perfect. Hope this brightened your day because your story definitely brightened mine and left me in suspense.
| DragonMaster000 chapter 49 . 11/12/2013
Well, this took me ages to get to. ; Sorry. I thought for sure at the time that I had reviewed this chapter, but looking back it was just the previous one. My mistake.
I thought this was a very unique take on how to end a Spyro fic. I've seen a few stories where Malefor returns as a hero/ally, but never one where he's made king of Warfang, and I thought that was a quite interesting way to wrap things up. I also liked the way you continued the characters' emotional struggles right up to the end. All in all, this was an enjoyable story and you should be proud of finishing it through to the end.
No critiques or criticisms to add that I haven't said before, so once again just keep watching out for those usual culprits in the punctuation. Other than that, just keep pushing yourself.
| Nightshade1712 chapter 49 . 8/15/2013
Great chapter, but where was the joke I don't think I missed it, but I didn't see it, any way great job on the chapter, Cant wait for the Sequel, I want to See Vegeta get his butt kicked by Spyro, or Sparx, oh or Malefor, that will be funny, any way great job on the chapter.
| cat chapter 2 . 8/5/2013
I liked this chapter too the part I liked was the end when Spyro told Cinder and I found out cinder is hideing something too
| catarina chapter 1 . 8/4/2013
I love the story except for the bad words and I was so interested In what he did to the portal master can't wait to read the next chapter.
| Nightshade1712 chapter 48 . 8/3/2013
Ok, I have to ask, is Nightshade Ok, he seemed not to be doing to well after having his energy drained a chapters ago, oh and do you plan on making another story after the Sequel to this, any way great job on the chapter, cant wait to see the next chapter.
| DragonMaster000 chapter 48 . 7/29/2013
One thing I like about the way you've handled this climax is the way that it isn't *just* action, it's heavily focused on the characters' emotional struggles. I see a good many stories that are just mindless fighting at the end that loses sight of the characters themselves, so I'm glad you went the other way. It made it much more interesting.
Nice chapter, and I'll be watching as usual for the final installment.
| DragonMaster000 chapter 47 . 7/22/2013
Well, I suspected that the fight between Sparx and parents would be an intense one, and I can't say you disappointed. It was a bit shorter than I was expecting, but then again it isn't actually over yet, is it? Still eager to see how things resolve themselves. Keep it coming, watch out again for those comma splices, and I'll be watching for the conclusion.
| spyrofan34 chapter 28 . 7/22/2013