|Reviews for A Game of Style and Brutality|
| Kurran chapter 3 . 4/3
Nothing special about this story- Not only does the author completely lack the knowledge how a professional sports organization acts as well as relationships between players and coaches in a professional sport.
No athlete has an actual "Just happy to be here" attitude, It's bs fed to the media which players are taught to say by agents (which you've also neglected) or older players in order to protect player image.
No such thing as 'progressing' and 'maturing' naturally in professional sports- Sports aren't a freaking rpg or something nerds can make sense of in fan fiction especially player development- Players either have it or they don't and Harry clearly doesn't since he had to tryout to even make the team (with a coach who would lose his players so fast it would make his head spin with that freaking attitude of his) Harry would be a bench player and reserve at best which makes this story completely pointless.
The idea for the story was a great idea but the plot and complete ignorance is a let down.
| Jake chapter 1 . 3/31
This Story is totally unique and I've got to say how much i enjoy it. It's refreshing to see a quidditch fic that is so centred around the actual sport, and I enjoy seeing Harry mature and grow as a player, the idea behind this is very well thought out. The detail you put into the games and training are also unsurpassed from what I have read, so congrats on that. Finally I am really enjoying the fun and bant that goes on between the characters, they get on in a way akin to other people their age rather than being completely obtuse to the way guys actually get on around women in real life, which again is refreshing. This is an area which separates your fic from others, and I'm a little concerned that, although Harry being in a relationship with Daphne isn't a bad thing, try not to make it into a soppy fanfiction surrounding their relationship, and if they do end up together, that's fine but the bant they've had so far has been good, and that's the reason why the readers would like to see them get together at all. Just try not to lose the fun aspect that is so central to this fic ;) Loving the work so far anyway, and looking forward to the next update
| LegendaryArimaspi chapter 13 . 3/17
Ah. So you're avoiding the whole "Harry never loses at Quidditch" cliche. Thank you for that. Not only does it provide a plot point that can stick for a chapter or two, but it adds a certain degree of realism.
| Teufel1987 chapter 10 . 3/13
Just how much of a bing drinker is Harry?
Seriously, either he has the constitution of a five year old girl or he really drinks more than a fish.
I get having hangovers, but for a day?! He had one till, what, two in the afternoon before he took that potion when he went to Greece?
And now, he only had a bottle of white … half a bottle if you count the girl …
So I can only conclude that he either got completely totally smashed or he has crap tolerance to booze.
| Teufel1987 chapter 7 . 3/13
Quote:"It is unlikely there will be any evidence," Krum said. "People are each given Omnioculars to record each individual player, so they will be inspected. Ackerley should know that.":End Quote
Um, I'm confused. How will it be unlikely that there will be any evidence when the actions of each and every player has been recorded by Omnioculars? That sounds like a lot of evidence right there.
Also, wouldn't Harry be made to eat more? He will have to increase his protein intake at the least if he is to build muscle which is what is going to be asked of him anyway. So I don't see why he has to worry about being on a diet …
Restrictive Diets that require you to lower tour food intake are for people who want to lose weight but aren't leading physically demanding jobs. Athletes bulking up have to eat more! Their intake (especially protein, i.e., meat) is especially high as they burn a lot of energy compared to normal people. You should see them … one can eat enough for two men! And they eat so much because they burn a lot …
Anyway, nice chapter. Harry seems shorter here than in canon. After all, there, he was at James' height when he was fifteen. And that was before the massive growth spurt he had before sixth year …
| Teufel1987 chapter 4 . 3/13
A very nice and different take on the Harry Potter genre … especially with Voldemort already gone!
I think the law about personal healers does have some merit. Considering how much they are getting paid, it isn't an issue, and having someone who knows you inside and out can only be a good thing! You don't have to worry about doing most preliminary tests.
I do think many athletes have doctors that they only go to. I don't see why such a law should be repealed …
Anyway, that's enough of that. Great story so far!
By the way, I don't think that Ravenclaws need to answer questions to go out…
And Sirius is not an "ex-con" …
Because to be an ex-convict or "ex-con", he would need to be a convict to begin with …
To be a convict, he'd have to be convicted…
In a trial…
Which he never had …
So how can he be an ex-con when he isn't a con?
| Death2Ignorance chapter 1 . 3/13
that was a great first chapter, the changes from canon were a bit abrupt but in fairness you did say AU i just didn't actually believe it because the term is so widely abused now a days.
| ALPHAQ69 chapter 13 . 3/13
Most awesome fic mate...always a wonderful read
| PiotrMc chapter 13 . 3/11
great chapter loved that harry lost
| Zconroy85 chapter 13 . 3/11
Great chapter. Definitely glad it came so quickly.
A real great back and forth between Harry and Daphne, and i do like the fact that Harry lost this match, shows some vulnerability and makes it more relatable that hes not perfect (as much as one can relate to flying on brromsticks haha)
Just hope things dont speed up too much. I dont mind waiting longer for a chapter if it means you get it how you want it.
| maesde chapter 13 . 3/10
And buuurn Potter! I bet he needs to wind up and chat Daphne some more :D A nice romantic chapter would do him a great kindness!
| AttonOwens chapter 13 . 3/10
It's safe to say this piece of Fanfiction is a cut above most. The general plot outline of Harry taking a Quidditch oriented route after Hogwarts and having ordinary yet challenging experiences makes this Fic a singular classic. From the very start, the this fanfic makes it clear that there can be more to HPfanfiction than overused plotlines and roll-your-eyes Draco/Hermione shippers. Harry is portrayed well, and this version of what could have been is, quite frankly, easier to believe than JK Rowling's version. He behaves normally for a man of his age, with his head on one of four things: sports, girls, his career, and having a good time with his friends. The Quidditch scenes are exciting to read, and it is very easy to believe in the characters as real people, which is essential to any great piece of fiction. The only problem I had with it is that while Harry's lack of friendship with the other 2/3rds of the "Golden Trio" is explained, it sadly doesn't hold much water. You don't simply drift apart from friends who have risked their lives for you. There would have to be a major betrayal involved, or, what could also be a good idea, have Ron and Hermione start dating which could serve as the mechanism for Harry to start distancing himself from them. Harry could do that out of a desire to let them have their "honeymoon" phase with each other, and then they simply never close the gap with him again. While still remaining friends, this would serve to explain why Harry would rather spend his time with his bachelor buddies, instead of being the awkward third wheel of the "Golden Trio". Other than that singular minor plotpoint, I thoroughly enjoyed this Fic, and I eagerly look forward to more.
| Slytherin Potter chapter 13 . 3/10
That was freaking amazing I enjoyed every second of it from Daphne's House to another fantastic Quidditch Match. Everything was to pure perfection I'm so glad your still continuing to update especially getting this early treat was a bonus thanks for that.
| AlsoKnownAsMatt chapter 13 . 3/10
Great chapter. You really illustrate the pain of Harry's defeat and, before that, lay some nice foundation work for a connection to Daphne. Thanks for your hard work on this, I'll be looking forward to the next update.
| Asian56 chapter 12 . 3/7
I'm so glad you're still updating! This is one of my favorite stories and I can't wait till Harry and daphne finally get together. Please update faster :)