Reviews for An Innocent Visit
The Scorn of the Moon chapter 1 . 6/8/2012
You're not very good describing sex scenes, remember that sex is instinctive, lovers don't use to ask questions while fucking xd
music watch chapter 1 . 5/27/2012
Good stuff you got here and very sweet :) keep up the good work. Although this story needs to be proofread. It looks like this was originally 1st person but then you changed it to 3rd (thanks for doing that) and at times it's hard to follow since you focus on one characters thoughts and reactions before switching over to the others thoughts/reactions giving the impression of a delayed reaction. But outside of that your story was very good! Two-shot? Maybe?
Annamiika chapter 1 . 1/25/2012
I think we did an awesome job writing this, we need to do more soon :D
Masquerade Link chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
I WANT MORE. Great work! Very steamy! : )