Reviews for Secret Loves Year 2
Cateagle chapter 23 . 12/11/2016
Hmm, so Lockhart transformed into some small animal to escape? I have to wonder how long Hedwig will have to hunt to catch him (that pursuit should be quite entertaining and my money's on Hedwig). It's good to see folk supporting Harry and his Ladies so strongly.
Cateagle chapter 10 . 12/9/2016
*whistles* Hoo, boy, those events are going to cause some major changes. I wonder how long it will take some of the other players to realize just how much has changed?
WBH21C chapter 23 . 11/26/2016
Very well done!
Pat chapter 23 . 10/21/2016
I was thinking more about this story overnight. Here are my thoughts, so that if you're ever going to continue it, here's some of what I want to see included:
-The DADA teacher (Lockhart) is now AWOL. What will happen to classes?
(-I don't recall a *lot* of mention of students actually, you know, going to *class*, in a *school* - other than Potions.)
-Have the students who had detention with Lockhart actually been raped? If so, and he used Obliviate, can the rapes be provably detected (by physical or magical means) so he can be prosecuted? What is his midget animagus form? Will he be caught?; will it be before he attacks again? Will he escape? If he's caught, who catches him?; how is he punished/killed, and by whom?
-Will Snape's fake Dark Mark let him know when Riddle calls? If so, will the different magic in the fake Mark alert Riddle that something is wrong? But if not, what will be the consequences of Snape not showing up when called?
-Is Harry going to marry anyone else?
-Are Neville, Hannah, and Susan going to end up married? Does Neville have any other titles lying around in the vault (that presumably his parents didn't know about, or had not chosen to take up) so that he *can* marry more than once? Is Harry really so kinky that he insists on watching girl-on-girl "Magic Kissing" (which is really a disguised form of sex)? Can girls use it to give boys orgasms, so we can all have non-penetrating, Safe teenage Sex anytime we can find privacy? (Do the poor Elves have to clean up the sheets afterwards?) Is there going to be a giant Magic Sex orgy with all 6 of them (or even more)? (Yuk.)
-Oh, yeah, the main plot line: The Chamber of Secrets! Is the list of petrified people going to match the books? What ends up happening to Ginny, does she get rescued/killed? If rescued by Harry, will she owe him a Life Debt, will he actually call it in/in what way? Does the Diary get destroyed, does the basilisk get killed/befriended, does Lucius get caught/punished?
-How will Millicent Bulstrode's friendship play into your plot line?
-What about Argus Filch and Mrs. Norris - if he does have enough magic to bind a familiar, how will that magic show itself in the future? And how will that play into your plot line, if at all?
-How will Padma's Hermione-obsession play into your plot line?
-Who poisoned Neville's parents? How did they manage it? Will they be caught/punished?
-What about the Grangers' new magical twins, how will they fit into the story?
-Will Narcissa finally divorce Lucius? Will she take Draco/will Draco be willing to leave with her?
-I rather lost track of the roles Sirius and Remus were playing in the story. But if they're in the story, they're Major Characters in the books, so they need to have a role.
-Will there be other ways in which Snape and Dumbledore show how reformed they are? What are the repercussions of Dumbledore's falling-out with the angry Aurors, if any?
-Any further roles for the Goblins in the story?
-What about that big apocalyptic battle that was dreamt of - how many fanfics forward from this one does that show up, maybe in "Secret Loves 20"?
-What about Hagrid's Wizengamot seat? Will it be important to the plot in this story, or a future story, or not? (For it to be of much use other than during Hagrid's lifetime, he needs to marry and have kids. I'm still trying to wrap my head around how a human man, Hagrid's father, managed to impregnate a giantess, Hagrid's mother. It would have been easy for her to carry a baby who was surely smaller than the average Giant-race baby. But how is Hagrid going to have children? Giantesses don't seem like great life-partners... Madame Maxime is the only half-giant we know of, other than Hagrid. So if *they* don't get together, Hagrid would need a human woman as his wife, and mother of his children. It would be tough enough to have actual intercourse, since his male part is presumably much larger than an average human man's. And even using artificial insemination (and Magic Sex within marriage) to get around that problem, his babies would be larger, you would think, than average human babies - and human babies are hard enough to deliver as it is! I doubt you need to have this thought involved in your plot, unless you take things far into the future. - oh, I'll bet Hagrid could *adopt*, or *designate* an heir, as Sirius Black has with Harry, if he doesn't have children of his own. Never mind!) ;)

This probably isn't even everything, but it's all I can think of for now. And I'll tell you - when I bookmark an unfinished story, and when I have this many questions at the end of an unfinished story, that means it's a good, interesting, complex, captivating story, and I would love to read more!
Pat chapter 23 . 10/20/2016
I see you said you hadn't abandoned this, yet it hasn't been updated for three and a half years. I'm bookmarking it anyway, in hopes you'll come back and add to it some day. Meanwhile, I'll check some of your other stories.
flashbak35a chapter 10 . 9/25/2016
one of my pet peeves in fan-fiction is names of canon characters i really dislike seeing canon names changed like changing Severus Tobias Snape to Severus Abaddon Snape. Now taking a name like Harry and saying that is only a nick name for like Harold or something i don't have a problem with.
mckertis chapter 7 . 6/13/2016
This version of Harry Potter, which you claim to be 12, talks like i did when i was 4.
TargeTPsY chapter 14 . 10/31/2015
I followed your google map and found this. Hammond's Fleet Care LTD whose address puts directly in the middle of the ocean. A business that is a auto body shop with an address in the middle of the ocean, in a HP fanfic. Are you trying to imply something? Because I find it hilarious.

Great story so far and I'm really enjoying it. Keep up the good work.

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Blessed Be
desireejones99 chapter 23 . 10/27/2015
Exceptional entertainment, hope you can find the proper muse to write more for this soon
desireejones99 chapter 9 . 10/26/2015
That was so beautiful, very tastefully done. More exceptional entertainment
desireejones99 chapter 3 . 10/26/2015
Poor Albus, so far behind the power curve.

Exceptional update
desireejones99 chapter 2 . 10/26/2015
A fan of click and clack, possibly, thanks for another excellent episode
desireejones99 chapter 1 . 10/26/2015
Excellent entertainment
LBII chapter 23 . 9/10/2015
Very good work. I am patiently awaiting the next you for sharing your time, talents and imagination.
monbade chapter 23 . 7/24/2015
Oh come on, you cant leave it there. We want to see lockheart meet the basalisk.

Waiting for more hopefully soon
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