Your grammar and spelling was fantastic. (: I've never heard of Love Hina, so I'm a little confused! Lol but it was an overall good fic. Although, next time you should try for a plot. I felt as though this story was mostly facts and descriptions. Very well written though! :D

Kinda unusual to read a story told by a turtle, but then again, this is the love hina universe we're talking about.

One thing I've noticed is your writing ability; it has improved greatly since your previous efforts (one or two mistakes, but they can be easily overlooked). As a one shot, this story is fine, and hopefully it will be a stepping stone for other stories you wish to write in the future.

Best of luck Ruto!

It's small chapter, but nice one