|Reviews for Coming Back|
| Ajax chapter 1 . 1/18/2012
First, I'd like to say that it was a good story. Your English is not too bad, but still requires some beta reading. The only thing that kept bugging me was the description of the parasite spreading because it didn't make much sense for such a thing to happen. Also, in the show once someone had the parasite in them they didn't last more than a couple of days at most. So contracting the parasite six months after Connor already survived it doesn't make sense. Last thing that kinda bothered me is burning the houses in order to eliminate the parasite. There was no need for that. It probably would not help them. Overall it was a good story and I enjoyed reading it. I hope to see more Psi Factor fanfics from you.