|Reviews for You'll always be mine|
| Jay chapter 1 . 4/14/2016
Do a sequel!
| Ciradel the ChronicleWriter chapter 1 . 4/26/2014
I simply can't disagree... This is a beautiful story. Go Rocketshipping!
| Rollover chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
Looks like ol' Jessiebell's got some obsession issues...anyway it was a nice little oneshot.
| Farla chapter 1 . 1/8/2012
Capitalize your title properly.
[2 years ago ]
Write out numbers with letters.
["I'm your family!" She barked. ]
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned or "Hello." he grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it." And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
[her Pokémon ]
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This all seems to be overlooking that whether or not he's also happy with his friends is beside the point, which is that he hates and fears her. He ran away because of that well before meeting up with them. If you want to do shippy stuff, put slightly more effort into it.