|Reviews for Harry and Luna Against the High Inquisitor|
| Loveandpower chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
I've always wished people would do more Flitwick involved stories.
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/16/2012
Hey, Just wanted to say I've enjoyed the premise - and even the fluff - in this story and read the prequal and this in practically one sitting.
That being said, I began reading it expecting a legit relationship having a positive influence on Harry. Other than being better boyfriend material... nothing has really changed. He's no more devoted to his studies (I bet he could charm a mean warming charm on Voldemort's robes though) and he doesn't seem any more smart or cunning as he was in canon.
In fact, he's so infuriatingly dull that it's painful. He more easily baited than tuna and he's thicker than a tree trunk.
Basically, he's canon Harry.
What I wanted to ask is, is the focus of this story going to be the fluffy relationship between Luna and Harry (which I don't mind at all, I even awww'd at many moments), and the other characters? Does Luna actually have to get hurt before he goes, 'Oh, maybe I should pull me head out of my arse?' Will some legit conflict enter the story?
As things stand now, this isn't conflict, it's contrived conflict, which I equate to the protagonists leaning over a barrel with their behinds prostrated towards the antagonists.
Some cunning rebuttals from out protagonists that bury the ministry in one masterful move would be brilliant. Hermione is correct, they have no case for libel unless they can prove in court that Luna's character has been damaged. You have Harry or Remus go to the prophet saying that it is 'entirely possible' Harry and Luna will split as a result of their articles. With a clean bill of health from St. Mungo's as well, libel will be more than proven and Harry would then have the ammunition to BURY the prophet.
It would all be a bluff, for example, and by forcing the prophet to cave, they've taken the ministry's ammunition out of their rifles. By the time they can set up their own publication, the prophet would bury Fudge and his regime.
This is an example, but it is a much better resolution to the year than Harry essentially following canon with slight deviations. MUCH better than Harry blowing up at every insult (being so defensive only makes the situation worse, he should KNOW that being bullied his whole life), while smiling and nodding at Umbridge's words and not gobbling up her bait like a starving tuna fish would be a refreshingly cunning response.
I would have been saying something completely different if you'd rushed the relationship and Harry's maturity/ emotional growth, but you've started excellently. As it stands, I think you've started strongly but have begun floundering towards the end. You need Harry to learn from his mistakes or he just becomes a frustratingly annoying protagonist.
Beating his head repeatedly against the Umbridge/Malfoy/Fudge brick wall like a petulant child is just that.
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/16/2012
*ponders* methinks Umbridge needs introducing to some vicious attack snorkacks. *nod nod*
to some extent, it would serve wizarding Britain right if they DID take her up on her offer. especially if their friends went with them. I mean, consider what happens to Wizarding Britain if all the non-pureblood wizards and witches up and leave? Voldemort wins, sure. then they promptly get invaded by various other wizarding nations to prevent the inevitable breaches of the statute of secrecy when Voldemort tries for muggle Britain as well, and certainly don't have the population to resist such.
essentially, wizarding Britain as an entity gets wiped out.
failing that, if they get isolated and every muggle-born leaves as soon as possible, simple genetics will do them in eventually.
(apologies if there are gaps in my logic. it's after 2am and i have a rotten cold so i'm not at my best.)
... not that those in charge would see it that way.
generally speaking, the proper response to such tyranny in an environment where recourse to the law does not lead to justice is assassination. not really something you want to start, but better than a war (and something their enemies will do Anyway.)
honestly, the biggest problem in Wizarding Britain is that the so called 'light' seems unwilling to actually DO anything. an attitude Dumbledore encourages, leading to the average citizen, who, given a rallying point, would protests this nonsense, simply keeping their heads down and staying out of it, leaving idiots like Umbridge free to do whatever the hell they want.
*blinks* stupid news articles. i'm in political rant mode again. whoops?
anyway, nicely written. I'd say Luna needs hugs, but she's already getting them *grins* makes a nice change from the number of fics where she needs hugs badly and doesn't.
| the.stories.live.on chapter 11 . 7/16/2012
This chapter had made me very agitated, though I suppose that was the point. I admire your ability to make me hate Umbridge even more that I already do. That is quite a feat. This chapter was frustrating in so many instances, but not necessarily in a bad way. It is upping the tension tremendously, but I just can't wait to see it resolved. Keep up the good work!
| Chandagnac chapter 11 . 7/16/2012
Another wonderful chapter. :)
Umbridge is really deliciously vile in this chapter. Utterly detestable. It makes me fear for both Harry and Luna's safety. It seems as though Dumbledore has already lost most of his power over the school (seeing as Umbridge is already going over his head and threatening to expel/imprison/exile some of his students).
You actually made me like Romilda Vane! That's never happened before! (Although I think her world view, as presented in your story, is rather dangerously deluded.)
I spotted one mistake (well, I think it's a mistake):
[quote]She was only snapped out of her revelry by Prissy Kempe of Hufflepuff came up to her and asked, "It's a lie, isn't it? You really wouldn't do that to Harry... would you?"[/quote]
I think you meant "reverie", not "revelry". Also, I think it should be "when Prissy Kempe of Hufflepuff came up to her", not "by Prissy Kempe of Hufflepuff came up to her".
| Preier chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
well, well, well... expulsion, internment or exile.
umbridge made her sale quite well i must say.
thank you for sharing your stories.
| EmD23 chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
Can Umbridge just die next chapter? Feed her to Aragog, I'm sure he's hungry.
| Alistair Ruadh chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
An excellent chapter, and your characterization of Umbridge is spot on, by way that I want to strangle something when she's opening her mouth and forming words. ;) Well done!
| BlazeStryker chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
KILLDOLORES. (bint isn't even worth two words.)
| 0rigami chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
Like others i too would like for them to accept the opffer and get the hell out of there; i always tought it would have made sense for harry anyway. I have no idea how the story would progress after that tough, no way in hell they would come back after deciding that enough is enough -.-
| Loki Firefox chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
I've said it before but it bears repeating: Your Umbridge is delightfully malicious, a true villain. So when Harry and Luna do triumph over her, their victory is all the greater.
Actually, I'm kinda hoping Harry and Luna take Umbridge's offer and go away and have the satisfaction of having the Ministry beg for him to come back when Voldemort reveals himself. And the bonus of how pissed Voldemort would be that Umbridge is responsible for putting Harry out of his reach, oh that would be sweet. But we all know that Harry wouldn't leave his friends.
Again I'd like to say how you deepen a character without changing them. Lavender and Romilda are usually written as twits or vapid, vacuous vixens but without changing what we do know about them, you give us more insight to their character. People forget that these two are in Gryffindor, meaning they have qualities that are shared with Harry, Hermione and Ron.
The pressure Harry and Luna face is staggering. And the bad guys are hateful. On one hand, I'm enjoying the fact that there seems to be plenty of chapter left to read but on the other hand, I want to get to the end so I can finally enjoy Harry and Luna's win over these monsters...although now come to think of, I think a slow but steady victory would be better. Just as I had to sit through chapters watching Umbridge and Jocasta and Malfoy take ten chapters to tear them down, I kinda want as much, if not more, chapters of them losing to Harry and Luna.
Excellent as always.
| Geo Nova chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
I didn't think you could possibly make me hate Umbitch more. Wonderful, horrifying twist, I can't wait until the evil toad gets what she deserves. Though I feel really bad for Harry until they figure this out, because the thought of what will happen if they don't figure it out is horrifying.
| gecoma chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
"Harry almost thought he saw moisture in the High Inquisitor's eyes, but whatever he thought he saw was gone in a moment."
Good god I detest that line.
| Akira Muratake chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
Since FFN is being a jerk and not letting me sign in, leaving a guest review.
Each update of this story is better than the last one! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
| the dork knight chapter 11 . 7/15/2012
Great chapter. Such a twist by Umbridge. I wonder if she actually has the backing by Fudge on her plan or if this is her own idea to get rid of Harry in any way she can.