Reviews for The Darkness Around Us
XenobladeMan44 chapter 2 . 5/2/2012
One word that can improve this. Paragraphs.

The great big field of text looks daunting, and kinda makes me think 'I can't be bothered to read this thing, it's huge!', where in fact, it is not. Not only do paragraphs make things easier to read, they also make the large amount of text look less daunting.

Do you know how to properly use them? PM me if you need any help :)
cynicalDreamers chapter 1 . 1/10/2012
I don't play Final Fantasy, but this was good :). The only thing I have to say about it is: When a new person is talking, put it in a new paragraph. On , you have to press enter 2 times so the letters don't look bunched up. That's the only bad thing. Everything else is good! :3