Reviews for For the While
EmmaDel chapter 1 . 1/24/2013
This isn't bad, but it's not always clear what is going on. You have a lot of dialogue and very little indication of who is talking. The action itself is also a little unclear. I know basically what happened, but I'm having a hard time picturing it.
YAOIboy19 chapter 1 . 1/21/2012
great work

doing it in public XD

SyringaGirl chapter 1 . 1/10/2012
Delightful. So lyrical, a joy to read! Thank-you :-)
ineedanewnameidk chapter 1 . 1/10/2012
Ahhhh, this was so beautifully done!

I loved how it was mainly from Leonardo's point of view, we readers don't usually get to experience what a 'side character' feels for the main characters.

I also liked how you wrote it in an almost lyrical way, it was very poetic and refreshing! The short lines were a nice break in comparison to reading the normal sort of 'heavy' fanfictions.

Overall I'd give this a 9/10! It was beautifully done, in character, and quite classy. ;D

My only critique would be that some parts of it were a bit rushed, even for this style of writing. Some details need to be in there so the reader doesn't get lost!